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Posted: **Wed Jan 07, 2009 11:50 am**

[align=center]You Estatic Everybody In My Regime Be Calm,
I Use Honesty, You Have More Twisted Drops Then A Slinky Plunge..
Given Ounces Of Triumph Eventually Alleviates The Physical Mountains
My Rhymes Have Meaning..I Could Give A Fuck About Syllable Countin
I'm A Spirit Without Friends,
Look Here..These Newer Haters Make Me Wanna Have Dispute With Players
I'm Steadily Calm..
Its Just They Ready To Put They Hands on Duce Like Anxious Manuere Labor
And Even Tho I'm Drained I Do Them Favors...
The Piccaso I Present The Whole View, We All Know Saving Youth Means Patience...
& Some Times These Cat Over Bite...So Now I Think These Sabor Tooth Need Braces
Now Boot These Statements...I Deliver Presence But Can I Seal The Right Package
The Weight Of The World On My Shoulders...Some Say I'm Feeling Like Atlas
I'm Concealing My Passion,I'm On My Route Let's See Who Delivers Mail Better..
You Speak Contradictory...You Just Swallow Yo Words Like An Appetite For Grail Letters
You're Just A Frail Feather, I Spit From Ether And Fevers To Sleeping With Reapers
Cats Try To Kick It...And It End Up All Left Field ..Reminds Me Of Illegal Precedures..
No Need For The Heaters, Cause I Hang With Huge Dudes And They Size Is Wow..
Now Niggas Asking For U ...Just Knowing Damn Well They Cant Buy A Vowel
You Can't Throw In Good Punches, You Should Try A Towel..
Wisdom Won't Come My Way..So Now I Just Despise The Owl..
It's Something Wierd To See But It Just Ain't What It Appears To Be...
Mother Fuckers Be Fake...Get Caught Dead On My Hood...Since They Act Like They Dear/Deer To Me...

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Posted: **Thu Jan 08, 2009 9:44 am**

This was up and down for me.
It was like "Yeahhh!!!" then "What?"
But thats not necessarily a bad thing. Good vocab, and structure.
Flow was abit ajar because of the substance of the words but it doesnt matter.
GOod concept and overall a nice piece.

Posted: **Thu Jan 08, 2009 11:09 am**

i Mean Honestly I dont like it.

i see what u were aiming for ... but i think your Rhymes are too off..

i mean.. could just be me but i saw a few bars and had to wonder what was supposed to rhyme.

I can understand topics being hard on structure
and i can forgive minor misses on the Rhymes
But if your content means more to you than Flow or making a rhyme work.
Then mabey You should try writing stories or something besides Rap?

Posted: **Thu Jan 08, 2009 2:25 pm**

LoL @ Rai..Chea Seemed Bipolar A Bit, Appreciate The Feed
And This Was A Freestyle..I Just Polished And Posted...

Posted: **Fri Jan 09, 2009 4:38 am**

Agree wid EGO...Wasn't feeling this one...

oh and by the way ... Stop wid yah GAy PM's!

Posted: **Fri Jan 09, 2009 6:16 am**

LoL Quix you just a hater
I K.od you and i don't even try on this site

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