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okay a quick keystyle i wrote what eva came into my head
an barely if any of it makes sense so imma call it my Crazy rap 3

Only The Brave And Fool Hearted Should Attempt-To-Start-Beef
so i'm exempt-from-part-heat bring full fire like stength-from-a-car-thief
what??
mafucka i be clingin to pointless wars like it was lord-of-the-rings
sellin shit whorin-these-things my words of metal jus scorin-these-strings
like a guitar-for-instance i aint up to par-for-innocence

Switch THIS SHIT UP

this guy things he pretty fly the way he hoppin-on-shit
poppin-up-clits hidin his true feeling watchin the clock-til-it-hits
the right time to stop duckin like daffy grow-up-too-last
cus when he shoppin-he-lifts sticky fingaz robbin-then-splits
hobblin-then-slips dodgey legs mafuckas robbed-him-now-it's
personal but u most like the smell of ya shit cus ya got ya nose-up-ya-ass

Switch THIS SHIT UP

i filled-n-betraying chilled-with-abrasions of these concielin-makin watch hate-that-i-bring
skill-wit-invasion of aliens thrilled-with-amazement ya lyrics i desercrate-when-i-sing
still-with-no-changin i spill-lacerations to kill-masturbation uphill-renovating
difficult yet a lil-with-much-hatin my ethnicity is white fuck it u right i'm a wigga tonight

ADD SUM SHIT

my ethnicity is white so dont impede on my potentcy-words
frozen-n-slurred the proximity in the vacintity is gold-n-yet-blurred
i'm holdin-my-first lacerations to abrogate radical holes-in-the-earth
too good i may have stolen-this-verse but it's mine i'm ownin-my-hearse
to my death too skeptical to alleviate ignorant mafuckas DNA
Do Not Abreviate or Dyslexic Nations Associate i hit low-n-late
at a faster goin-rate than Usain after the world record show-is-take
i throw-mistakes out the window white paper like snow-my-face

NAH NAH CUT RIP THIS SHIT UP
WHAT THE FUCK WERE U THINKIN
OH WAIT U WEREN'T

lol.. this was odd..

flow for the most part was good.. last verse was my favourite.. had some relevant plays and the concept for the DNA was clever..

i dunno what way you work your multis?.. can you share this with us?.. cause they are unusual.. like the kill masturbation bit lol.. thats an unusual phrase.. and the multi's odd too.. some of the lines didn't make sense.. it was kinda like lets throw in some multis and lose meanin', obviously this was a freestyle.. in the sense that you where talking about nothing imparticular..

some of the bits had promise.. however

this guy things he pretty fly the way he hoppin-on-shit
poppin-up-clits

thats random lol.. and doesnt make a whole lot of sense lol.. do you write a sentence and think of multis as you go?.. or do you get a list of multis and then make a sentence.. i assume you do the first.. when you may benefit from doing the second..

overall - it was easy enough to read it all, i'll need a bit more info to fully analyse it..

it was a solid piece.. multis where good.. but could use better direction, flow was good, but could use better meaning..

overall solid man.. keep doing..

damn, you keystyle hyphens? Thats sick! Lol Just playing... I have an issue with the term "keystyle" but I won't get into it and ruin yer thread.

Anyways, flow was pretty nice, has some good multies. Could have done without the 'switch this shit up" but overall a nice solid drop.

sOLID...rEAL SOLIIID SHIT HOMMIE!


i liked this one, flow was illy and the content had me Rolling!!

thanks fo the feed peeps