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(this is my first time singing over chorus lol)

(Verse 1)
In my knowledge i now understand the sequel of an ese
It all depends on how you live your life from your essence
survive this strife never gotta go hard
Thats why these vatos end up in their own graveyard
In my intentions im finding a better way to cope
Youll never find the definiton of a true hope
Gotta drive slow, never lose your faith in god
Thats why these homies in the pen are jacking credit cards
Forget about what happened in the past live your life
Another thing im trying to say is get away from knives
All these emos wrong, life is more then just a sob
waking up with bloody fingers and bloody scarrs
Everyday brings opportunity and no one cares
Kinda hard to see that hardly anyone have prayers
People getting lazy, never looking for a job
Others gettin scared, runnin from tha lynch mob

(Verse 2)
Rest in peace to all the rappers right above the clouds
Looking down saying that aint what rap is about
rolling down the bolo banging on some oldies songs
noticing that banging to this in the only one
These little kids are having suicidal thoughts in mind
wonder how these people can get so easily blind
when you need the money why cant you open a bar
when you can go to war and not recieving travel cards
Eversince i was a little kid its been the same
little kids runnin around dealing cocain
Our time is now we aint gotta wait long
when will we actually get away from them doing wrongs
Im waiting patiently for an existing miracle
ive lost my paitients for all the worthnothing ridicules
My life has last living till my bodie falls
unlike some others wasting their life on them cigars

(Verse 3)
why dont they free the homie spm from the pin
convicted for an accusation now thats hella sin
-to all my homies living life behind them bars
making deals with them crooked cops and them crooked guards
-Incarsirated for them bullshit accusations
remember to look on the ne-t for them admirations
some of them are real the rest of them are really not
willing to sacrifice for you even against them cops
Coming up in this world this game they call the rap
ive seen so many gangsters and them tricky hood rats
why we gotta treat our women like a bunch of dogs
hopefully we find a better way i pray to god
One more thing i have to rap about is phedophiles
I cant believe micheal jackson would get a better trial
Lets pray to god, i hope he knows its not our fault
Do this for me before i spit my very last bar



Chorus:
For every fight
you gotta try to find
a better life
thats why we always strife

singing actually wasnt that bad, pretty decent..
..yer verse verse was decent.. kinda went off the flow alil- not so much off beat.. u juss streched ur voice so the lines wuld stay on flow.. didnt sound so good for the beat.. also in the 1st verse kinda sounded like u were trying to pronounce ur shit to much, but it juss sounded kinda wierd.. almost like there was too much saliva in ur mouf er sumshit..
2nd n 3rd verses were real good tho-- definitly stepped ur game up.. nice track all around my dood..

btw, was that u talking at the begining of the trck..?

thanks g, the intro is something like, if my son asked me about my life, what progress will there be? will there be any? etc

Dis track was aight homie I like da way u did ur hook but I could see a nigga or a female dat could actually sing on dis track ur voice didn't fit wit da singin so naw dawg u can't sing sorry lol, and u rappin along wit it didn't help da hook like wat u did wit da effect on da hook, da beat is dope. Like wat u did wit da plot 2 da track dat stood out a lot but ur accent killed it 4 a nigga and u need 2 get off dat free SPM shit I like SPM grew up on him nigga is dope but so many rappers is sayin free SPM since he was locked up and its gettin annoyin' its like Jezzy sayin AAYYY on every fuckin track. So stay away 4rm dat and practice more on ur sound dawg ur shit is good and it could be better if u do keep droppin and droppin.

Pretty nice concept for a song. Kind of reminded me of sumthin that 2Pac would talk about in the record in way. Not sayin you sound or get off like Pac, but that's just what the song reminded me of at first listen lol

The hook was straight...I'd have to disagree wit these guys. I liked it. Only thing you need to work on is getting the timing on your double-ups right. You're a lil off on some of them and thats what takes away from your music. Lyrically it's decent, but no major elements are missing. But yes...I've heard some of your ealrier work and you are getting better.

Keep pimpin.