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Heard You Say My Shit About My Name, Knowing That I Despise Yo Mentions
So When I Caught Up With Dude ..He "Lightened Up" Sorta Like Vitiligo Symptoms
What You Do Is For Fake.. You'll Catch Hot Explosions, So Fag Stop The Gloatin
Scared To Take Blame...I'm Noticing Asphault Alleviates Like Black Top Erosions
You Can't Knock The Showin, He Talks So Much Shit He's...Hearin Folks Diss'em
And By The Way His Gums Bumpin..You'd Figure His Rooth Canal Had It's Own Stereo System


Feed..

As fault/asphault

good creativity on ur rhyme scheme and word manipulation.. keep writin.



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this was okay.. 6 line is riduculously short for a scripture piece, so thsi was just okay..as fault i didnt like.. gum bumpin was pretty clever.. lightened up has been done before under a different expression.. so this was alright.. keep it up..

Thanks for the feed
And yeah.. i was in the library bored..so it was quick one

@ Philosophers son.. i got you bro im bout to give feed now on your drop

Liked The Choice Of Words,
Whos This a Diss 2?.. lol.

Lines Aint Really Hit Hard
The Last Line Came Correct Though..

You Can't Knock The Showin, He Talks So Much Shit He's...Hearin Folks Diss'em
And By The Way His Gums Bumpin..You'd Figure His Rooth Canal Had It's Own Stereo System
^^^
lol. that line was dope

LoL Hazard
this wasn't a diss to no one
lol i just put that so it would get attention..

thanks for the feed cee and haz

it sucked Infected asssSSS!!



nough said













































playing, wasn't bad a lil short though!

LoL...Thanks !