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a life and death collaboration,
an antagonist pessimist against a nation,
stars to the moon a constellation,
pronounced a proficy a revalation,
back witta vengous venomous vigilants,
a stranger angered amongst some immigrants,
no intelligence needed to be reminded,
blinded by the sites of life rewinded,
cant get behind it no followin to control,
ur mind, twist the truth swallowin ur soul,
jus speak it, release the pen to the pad,
look to the future but keep ur head in the past

i wonder what this is.. lol

but this is a symbolikull piece man

easy.

vocab stands out, ur flow is unique, and good endrhymes...

Nothing Special For a Intro,
U Wanna Make a Come Back Hope U Bring Heat.

dis was koo dawg I thought it was finna be longer tho nigga hope u come harder next time round I kno u could do better than dis

back witta vengous venomous vigilants,
a stranger angered amongst some immigrants,

^ da line dat stood out 2 me lol haha shit is nice

keep droppin dawg

this was pretty good
nice flow and yeah the vocab
stood out hope ya bring sum fire next time
this was a lil short so cant really get a whole opinion
keep'em comin

Not bad you have a stand out rhymescheme that benefits your flow and execution. Vocabulary was ill, however a few lines were forced looking to me such as this:
stars to the moon a constellation,
Definitely could have been re-worded so I grasped what you were trying to say without actually thinking about it. And the 'vigilants' line was a bit confusing too but I'm guessing you meant to say 'vigilance'?
Still, dope for what it was and I look forward to seeing some ill drops since this is only a 'hint at what's comin'. Keep doing you.