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I've been going thru alot of shit latly with my life
Was in a real bad Depression state when i wrote this
and this is what i was feeling at that time
its what ive been feelin latly for that matter of fact
I feel so helpless at times and i dk why
i feel like i cant control my future or anything i do anymore
its like im doing this all for nothing

Story:
Im pleading to god to let me kill myself or die
in some sorta way
im asking him to take away my will power to live anymore
but im too strong to do so
and i dont wanna have will power anymore

thats kinda the gist of it

(Viral was suppose to mix this but hes takin too long so im posting it now, Possible remix of this)

im loosin my breath im loosing my touch//
thats why im sittin here feeling so fucked//
cant deal with this cold air in my lungs//
i cant do this when im not having fun//
My bodys getting weaker by the Minute//
this Game of life i just cant win it//
Its too much for my pride to swallow//
My soul feels the burn than Ends up Hallow//
No matter how much i claw at these eyes//
my heart is telling my body to die//
Any second now im going to break//
because theres not much more of this i can take//
please tell me why im living this life//
So much pain can be ended with this knife//
Why am i blessed with strong will power//
Just let me go and kill the coward//

Im Loosing My Breath im loosing my touch//
Thats why im sittin here drowning in this cup//
gettin fucked up just to ease this pain//
Feels like my body is pulling this train//
of what god calls the wieght of life//
Please be waiting for me at the gate tonight//
to swear me into happiness and peace//
you gotta make sure this pain will be released//
so i can let myself in,i gotta get in//
This neutral ground doesnt want me to win//
No matter how hard i try i keepin falling//
I just gotta hear those angles start calling//
i need to hear that sweet melody//
feels like my world just fell on me//
replace my grave with this tree//
just go ahead and let me be//

wasn't bad... the concept of the story was good... lyrics were good... but u rushed em kinda... fell off a few parts... but good song dude... u've really gained some skills dude... just keep at it... rate this 7/10... good shit

dope beat
lyrics were straight
nice story to it
maybe rushed a lil but
i think it worked well
keep'em comin dead this was pretty good

Dead Silence wrote: (Viral was suppose to mix this but hes takin too long so im posting it now, Possible remix of this)

lol ^^ yea my solo still needs mixing, but i'll be droppin that reguardless later today




ur kinda gettin the idea of how to flow, but u gotta keep it smooth, its like... tick tock tick tock tick tock clock..that's the kinda flow ur doin it at, ur improving tho, better then some of the other tracks i've heard from u, not exactly feelin the beat and shit.. sounds a lil ..weird lol, i dunno haha just keep droppin man...and like lawgix said the story was good, i enjoyed reading it more than listening but its easier to improve on audio then it is in lyrics.. course some might disagree.. n e ways leave some feed on my new shit

MRAH!..haha..i just got all my shit up and runnin again..i told u lastnight to re send da shit to me..but u didnt..haha..i can still mix it for u if u want to...im usin other shit wit my mixer now...but yeah...get at me if u want me to mix it still

mix my solo u nigger