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ha Mutual Hostility

I Was raised with a poor family kids bullying me on the block
no guns but knives were involved i was tryna be dogin the cops
robbin the rocks of diamond from any necklace i can find
wrecklace left behind i sift through the mist n forgive
the shit of which they put me through cus it got me through
the jist is what i hadda get hold of they told us the old ones
uphold dust n know us we flow just no fuss this n thats it
my revelations of desercrations towards massive hatin
the immaculate satan for drastic fate n i ask ya satan
was this life really meant for me or meant to be ready
for a sinner a winner through cheatings beatings greetings
lyin through the tip of the teeth decieveing n pleeding
innocent even tho we know he not worth seeing as a problem
we jus nod n get on with are lives on with are cries
of demise n dispise ya premise of the lies n we try
to get by but we die inside a little bit everyday wonder y
we really try to defy the rules which i hate so much i sigh
to spy under duristiction to my skies my preditction is the guys
who betray me will be fried in my eyes as tried an crucified
unverified then specified to tell who with me or who petrafied
you'll all have to be reclassified when i pop mainstream n time
when i rhymes n my lines come to life with my chime of greatness
how could anybody really hate this i make this

i never really understood
how anybody really could

live with the dyin live with the frying live with death
with a breath like another step dye to regret what u said
is a wreck when u get u give n set out to forget what ud did
under stress n u flip in the street pour ya heart out on a beat
always doubt for deciet but the truth is it's ruthless
i'm righteous u cant deal with ma likeness u bite this
it's like this

how really understand when u lose ya fam
how can u stay a good man with blood all on ya hands
do u see what i demand is rights from this land
i will not leave till i see what i need that will be
no fights turn up the lights n write for whats

RIGHT

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I See What You Tried To Do.. But Your Rhyme Scheme Was Just.. How Can I Put It... Not Stringed Together The Right Way.. Makin Shit Awkward... Felt Like You Didn't Put What You Feel But You Wrote What You Feel Fit's In The Category Of "Rap"... If That makes Sense to You.. Seen You Drop Better Pieces... This Looks Like a Experiment ... I Dunno Just Keep Doin You Keep Droppin.. You'll Get it ..

thanks fo the feed haz much preciated

i actually understood this drop more than ur usual..
so improvin IMO..i like the concept..multis were aight.. but
mutual i think the weak spot on your flow is your transfers..
when you switch your rhyme vowels..you wanna do it on the 1
or the 3 it's easier for people to follow the flow if you do
it that way..IMO..well keep droppin dude..

thanks tre much preciated if anyone want feed leave a link

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