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i was bored so i changed shit..peep it..n gimme some feedback..peeeace


ima menace torturin kids worse den dennis//
ive avenged hits, whippin fire shots like mario tennis//
deranged-docta gettin attacked by surgical tools, while ur veins-r-sponsored//
wit-flames-hot-ta(hotter), den mage's castin hex's on insane-monsters//
explain my concience, wit enraged-responses, i play wit con-victs//
shit pertains to onyx, liftin an engaged-accomplice, blowin up ur tank like con-flict//(conflict desert storm..game)
maybe random but still got my hand on-a-glock//
wit no time on da-clock, i rewind den-i-stop//
takes 9 times for dis-shot to bounce off n hit-a-cop, makin dis bitch-watch//
enter a brawl n witness my fists-pop, like i stole ur wrist-watch,inflictin sickness like a dick-spot// (STD'SS!!!...lol)

personality flip....

im schitzo wit a lit-flow, make u hit a high pitch wit a slit-throat//
u couldnt catch up on a full tank a gas from Sit-go(citgo), wit-hit-notes//
u couldnt battle-rap if u had a-strap, n i gave u a chance to paddle-back//
like a bitch dat ull never-tap, even try a-trap, failure like wen jill tried to straddle-jack//
frame-delay u can blame-da-gay, from day-to-day is how i spray wit-blades//
claim-to-say im endangerin-dames(girls),fuck da lions dey-tamed send u to africa makin some-trades//
cursed by-birth, dispearse-the-worst, imbersed-wit-verses, i spit-n-burst-lips//
get u killed on my-turf, reverse-the-curse, gank nurse-n-purses, like broken-down-hurstes//(carries coffins)

deranged-docta gettin attacked by surgical tools, while ur veins-r-sponsored//
wit-flames-hot-ta(hotter), den mage's castin hex's on insane-monsters//

i really liked that bar

cursed by-birth, dispearse-the-worst, imbersed-wit-verses, i spit-n-burst-lips//
get u killed on my-turf, reverse-the-curse, gank nurse-n-purses, like broken-down-hurstes//


You are getting much better at multi's, and the flow has a real original edge to it. (To me).

Overall: 9.0/10,

this was really a good flow, looking for more feedback!!

4/5 nice shyt( i think i already gave u feedback in an IM.. oh well lol here's more

im schitzo wit a lit-flow, make u hit a high pitch wit a slit-throat//
u couldnt catch up on a full tank a gas from Sit-go(citgo), wit-hit-notes//

probably my favorite.. nice multis n wordplay along with a good flow... keep it at that and evil won't need another member lol

lol thanks..in dat case we dont need another member...lol...yea dats my favorite bar too...hahaha...peace