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Lyrics:

Mutual
Hostility
Yeah

Ha

Hook - 17.274
When I Step Into House
If It's Me U Talkin Now
Then U Best Had Shut Ya Mouth
Ya Fuckas Gotta KNow Wot I'm About
Know What I'm About Yeah

Verse 1 - 30.034
see i take no shit definite no debate on it
some say i'm too great to spit i'm gone relate with this
see truth lies in deciet lyrics to deep i deny to this sheet
str8 through the floor ridin my beat fuck it i'm writin asleep
wipin the slate decidin it's fate got me slidin in place
defyin the hate to reach me the choices i make aint easy splat
all ya be actin greezy i aint touch upon the hood cus i'm wearin a cap
glarin at cats poppin gats? nah cops come, they droppin shit like rats
snitchin n switchin they friends so they know new facts no one can relax
not til they we catch the demeanors endeavour an ever it seems us
good people will always be gettin screwed yet we stick to the street cus
it's our home
we all on our own


Hook

Verse 2
see now it's apocolyptic u dont wanna cross this big ish
ya spittin stinks like u was str8 jus flossin with pig shit
i'm bossin with cryptics tossin ageless but worth it like mystics
statistics impossible fly thru the air man lets stay realistic
the hood no good fo people lookin to make rich lookin to late rap
millions of rappers happen to be lookin to make that u take facts
i carry the rage of the egyptians
captured then tortured before being sent on missions into collisions
of which permission is given to kill or imprison the infidels that have risen
to make an incision brings wisdom so listen like a patition
the votes are in count em again make sure none of em missin
i'm wishin i could go home safe so at a steady pace
i race like 30km to face the truth in my disgrace
what a waste this would be if after this nothin is what i create
it's my fate without a doubt
stop all this hate i've had it now

feed will be returned

Not a great song. Personally I think you could do with out saying things like "Yeah" & "Mutual Hostility" at the beginning of the song. It adds nothing to it, if anything.. it takes things away from it. If the quality of the song isn't up to par, then people really don't want to hear it.. it will probably just make them laugh, rather then getting them hyped up for the song.

The chorus was really bad.. it didn't fit with the beat at all, and really would have benefited by not being in there. The first verse was OK, it was nothing special.. but as soon as you hit the chorus a second time, I could barely make it through. You started the 2nd verse in the middle of the chorus, which totally threw off everything. You couldn't keep your flow together and you sounded terrible. Basically the last half of the song was complete garbage..

I would suggest taking some time to learn the beats your going to be using a little better, and understand where things like the chorus and verse come into play. It will definitely help you out and the folks listening. Also, try and differentiate the chorus from the verses, they sound too similar. Think of the "chorus" like the listeners escape from the "verse", if it's the same as everything else, why would people want to go there? Just try and be a little more creative. Other then that, just work on fixing up your flow a bit.

I know I was harsh and there is definitely no hate towards you, but this is some honest feedback. Just keep practicing and try and work on some of the things I mentioned.

Peace.

man preciate the feed i'll work on shyt