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aye yall i kno mosta these new kats dunno me but the old heads of illest do..finally gotta chance to drop somethin..an open collab i found on SINIMAS page an decided to lace it with some shit..lemme kno what yall think,feed will be returned.

Open Collab:Vocals By & Beat By SINIMA

chorus: Sinima & Tramatik
zip zilch notta notta thing
comes close to the shit that we bring
its gotta ring to it
meanwhile were unsigned we gotta keep movin
its justa matter of time before they see who is
next in line whos next to shine
whos tracks are fiyah u can betcho life
its
remember the name so u can [erkk mimic fast park noise]
park that shit up on memory lane

verse2: [tramatik]
now when u hear my name u bitches shake in fear
yes im so sincere u lame lemme make it clear
my careers the same have breakin in tears
have u disappear in flames bitch taste the sheer
magic from tongue u see the static when i come
a whole army behind me tramatik get it done
u can record a few lines an get to droppin tracks
but if u aint dancin wit it people aint coppin that
now thats the problem what happen to bein true
why dontchu spill ya heart start askin for the truth
wheres the days of Rakim,Biggie an Tupac
now the mainstream rockin its a pity dudes not
even close to bein real my minds infested
with all this bullshit thats really accepted
its no wonder why my shit is rejected
its seems nobody knows what respect is
[NAWW]

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leave the chorus alone
lol no hate but wasnt feelin wat u were saying

ur lyrics were good
but quality still lacks
but ur trying atleast which is a good thing

it sounds like ur sick or sumtin

Beat goes hard...definately a nice open collab from Sinima.
Only thing that ruins this track the most is the crispness of your drop.
I dunno if it's the way you mix, or what your recording it onto thats effecting the clarity...but whatever it is, it needs to be upgraded and resolved. Thats mainly what hurts ur tracks the most.
Lyrically is fine, flow-wise you're getting better...so i see the elevation there. Just need to fix that mixing thing.
Agrred wit Dead Silence...u should leave the hook as it. Both of you on it just sounds like it's being "over-done"
Keep droppin Vince.
Stop slackin!!! lol You used to drop all the time. Bring that Tram back!

gotta agree wit da homie Kurse mixin' needs made help and dat beat is hard Sinima got sum sick beats, DS was right bout da hook sounds sort of whack IMO jus have Sinima do it besides all dis tho ur gettin better was waitin on u 2 drop sum shit but I thought it was finna be a solo but good shit work on da mixin' tho dawg make sure its on point b4 u even drop n e thing stay up 1

first off i agree with erry body about the quality of your vocals
that aside let me give you some decent feed ..

hmm ..well the beat was aight..sinima beats are ruthless..

the hook didnt sound good IMO..but i dont think
it was completely your fault..no hate..the errkk sounds a lil cheese
tiny bit..good concept seems like he rush wrote it though IMO

your verse...i read this once at work but couldnt
listen to it..it's lyrically good pretty deep..but ya
flow... needs improving....delivery too..presence is
better then the previous 2 catagories i mentioned..

i think i expected it to sound like tupac..as far as ryhtm flow
and delivery wise cuz your avatar..haha..

all in all it needs some work IMO..sorry

i dont know how long you been doin it but keep doin ya thing mayne..1