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Stuck In Sea

Posted: Sat Apr 11, 2009 1:26 pm
by Haz
[align=center]I'm Floating Till A Boat Cruises By
And I'm Given The Momentum I Can Use To Fly
So I Become Focused & Get To Stroken
Only To Realize My Legs Are Broken
I Still Sit Waiting Cold Cause My Soaked
Feathers Give Me More Weight To Hold..
I Swear It's Just a Daily Struggle
I Think Why Do My Wings Fail Me? Puzzled
Feeling Troubled as The Sun Go's Down
I Won't Drown My Mind Is Set On My Boat
I Won't Be Regreting Hope
I Wish My Creator Would Give Me Feet
If I'm To Lose I won't Forgive Defeat
I'm Anxious Cravin A Rib Of Beef
Then I Remember We Eat To Live We Don't
Live To Eat..I Can't Act Like Livings Cheap
The Night Go's So I Sit There Alert
Hoping My Previous Wish Will Work..
So I Flap Once, Flap Twice Thinking
There's One More Stroke Ahead..
Then My Eyes Opened With Out Blinking
We're All Born With Broken Legs
Yet Some Sit On The Wrong Anchor Or Drown
While Other's Are Picked Up Or Still Around
..I'm Sitting Lost In A Sea Of Choices Facing Days Of Rain
Staying Afloat Till A Boat Comes Around That Displays My Name[/align]

Posted: Sat Apr 11, 2009 8:24 pm
by GrimBlaze
We're All Born With Broken Legs
Yet Some Sit On The Wrong Anchor Or Drown
While Other's Are Picked Up Or Still Around
..I'm Sitting Lost In A Sea Of Choices Facing Days Of Rain
Staying Afloat Till A Boat Comes Around That Displays My Name

^^^^my favourite part of this drop.

read more like a poem to me man but the message was cool, i can relate to this. imagery was a little hard work in places but overall a nice deep drop.
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Posted: Sun Apr 12, 2009 5:42 am
by TreTru
well i went over it 2 or three times.. this is actually good
pretty deep...ithe first read through..i didnt fully grasp the entire
concept ..but by the second i was on board..hahaha..

anyways the end helped wrap things up real nicely i'd consider that
a progressive style..real artistic..grasping different concepts that
dont seem to correlate at first and then WHAP!! they all converge
and drop ya damn jaws...haha..

nice poetry type script good shyt IMO..keep scriptin Jig..1

Posted: Thu Apr 16, 2009 3:23 am
by Haz
UPPIN FEED!..

Posted: Thu Apr 16, 2009 6:08 am
by Quix
wasn't feeling this one Hazzard dah Bastard!


uhmm but yeah, it was average i guess!

Posted: Thu Apr 16, 2009 10:39 am
by Phasewon
this shit was on point, whenever you convey your message metaphorically though alot of times it's gon' go over cats heads and your true message is gonna get overshadowed, so I can't say I fully understood what this was about, but in terms of fundamental skill, everything was displayed nicely, vocab, multies, flow, structure, no complaints, good shit.

Posted: Thu Apr 16, 2009 12:01 pm
by Haz
Good Looks Phase!! .. N Quix lmao @ Your Opinion...