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Nemesis #1

Posted: Sat May 16, 2009 12:29 pm
by NoVeL
I lie down unlawful living, I've sinned asking 4 sleep

Lord Jesus can you come down from heaven, and look after my peeps

I'm not naive like amateurs be, have your manager wanting advance while you relaxing on beats

flow so cold you'll drag on the feat, frostbites looking after ya feet

Some truth to sky-walkers like Anakin be

Star wars a battle emcee,

ready for limelight who wanna battle with me

Battle with clips, handling bars

Damage ya car when your 'losing ya grip'

Several battles I ripped, couple landed couple banded, majority flipped

Art of war closet full of red and blue paint

Like a battle wit Crips

battle persist, I'll claim a battle like a battle in sickness

So take 'a hit' 2 ya flow, sparked battles from diss

I battled so much, who knew I'd lose a battle

Re: Nemesis Pt 1

Posted: Sat May 16, 2009 12:35 pm
by ugly
this is cool, probley in length about 4 bars
Im guessin this wasnt a serious lyrical verse huh?

so i wont rate it, but if it is serious

2/10

Re: Nemesis Pt 1

Posted: Sat May 16, 2009 12:54 pm
by NoVeL
Nah its really just a string of raps, nuttin serious ugly
thanks 4 da feed tho much preciated.

-NoVeL

Re: Nemesis Pt 1

Posted: Mon May 18, 2009 2:17 am
by eMCee Havic
this was alright if it was a keystyle but other than that the flow was off, it didnt really seem like you out more than 10 minutes in to it. but it is what it is, rhymescheme was weird,

but i read it
this is my favorite line
"I'm not naive like amateur's be, have your manager wantin advance
But you still relaxin on beats,"

after that it was average

keep the flows dropping
peace