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written to "wrong side of the tracks instrumental by the Artifacts

heres the beat http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JkfAAabO9jc

yo



im on the wrong side of tracks, can't look back
fuck that, i could suffer attack, so i be buffin my axe
its nothin to pack, this motherfucker close to me
standing on the battle ground just smoking weed
while choakin feinds. fuck battle i provoke emcees
the dopest thing you've ever seen, never clean
a clever being, spitting when the situations critical
i'll kill you literal, le, when i get it physical
the lyrical and mystical, spittin visions in his dome
this is shown an spit an owned, but it isnt condoned
i'll visit your bones, with a hammer and chizzle for stone
an chizzle your dome, cause i'm crazy wit pistols alone
a little bit stoned, my bullets will still riddle your bones
i sizzle microphones, while spittin to the artifacts
i could write a masterpeice rebuild and start from scratch
i'll live an die for hip hop thats where my heart is at




uppin for some good feed

Pretty Entertaining For a Drop With No Real Topic, Just Sptiting. Doesn't Mean it Was Bad Or Anything id Say it Went Well With The Beat And if i Heard it as a Track id Probably Like it. i Think a Few Punchlines And Quotables Would Benefit a Piece Like This a Lot And Give it a Bit Of Zest. Aside From That i Was Feeling The Flow And Multis, Some Rhymes Didn't Really Need To Be There But Would Still Sound Good On Audio. No Complaints Though ive Seen a Few Topicals Etc From u So i Know u Like Switching Around.

thanks for the feed good lookin, still uppin

i thought Domino pretty much summed this up

this verse was pretty good. i liked the beat and felt the verse would sound good over it. as for the drop itself it was decent. i agree with domino that there was no real topic or opinions/emotions expressed. this makes it almost impossible for it to be a great verse but it was cool for what it was. ive seen some of your other shit and know you can do the topical, political shit so its all good. for a self hype/"im gonna kill you" type piece such as this you should try and include standout punchlines or lines with shock value that grab the readers attention. but on audio i think this would work well

my favourite bit was the closing lines

i sizzle microphones, while spittin to the artifacts
i could write a masterpeice rebuild and start from scratch
i'll live an die for hip hop thats where my heart is at

thanks man, yeah its just a purely audio piece. not ment to woah and awe, just sound dope over the beat. thanks for the feed. i got a new topical up to.

uppin