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This the encapsulation of an emancipation
With a handsome face im like Manson/Jason
If theres a chance I`ll take it like a cancer patient
Advance to make it, I`ve survived all the obstacles
Gave em parts of my life, just disguised as a topical
Soaked up the bloodshed, my eyes like the hospital
Punches fly like its ‘rock n roll’, but this anger got to stop
Dreamt i took the cancer out my pops then passed it to the cops
Then im dancin til they drop, yep ya boy be getting hassled
Coz now i got a record, that leaves employers baffled
My voice need now a scaffold, no man wanna anchor me
So i only stand for me, I wouldn’t lend a hand to an amputee
You`d demand a guarantee, coz the rocky road I crash on it
I could be a schizophrenic; you wouldn’t know the half of it
Im known to make an ass of it, been a halfway crook now im awake
Now im kinda like an x ray.....just lookin for a break
Before im booked in with the state, or the wind blow n my ass out
Im anti violence, but ive smashed every window in my glass house
Im my own worst enemy, but do these restraints have to last?
They say every sinner has a future, and every saint has a past

yeah strait dope homie, metas where fire. deeper than most, like you was leakin some emotion in it, so i flowed it with emotion and shit was good. multis and punches were on point. i like almost everyline in this piece 8.5/10


favorite lines

"if theres a chance I`ll take it like a cancer patient"

"So i only stand for me, I wouldn’t lend a hand to an amputee"

"Before im booked in with the state, or the wind blow n my ass out
Im anti violence, but ive smashed every window in my glass house
Im my own worst enemy, but do these restraints have to last?
They say every sinner has a future, and every saint has a past"

the closer was tight homie

peace

This shit was tough you have the best metaphors/punchlines in a written peice ive eve seen on this site and you did it all with out landing way off topic in fact in my eyes u were pretty precision on point. If u recorded this and had a dope flow and audio voice the general public would love it

9/10

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This shit was nice. Good flow, some good rhyme schemes. Good to see others portray a little bit of heart in a verse. Definitely liked the last 3 bars, very nice.

i Was Actually Pretty Concerned That u Were Gnna Fall Off Since u Ain't Been Dropping Much Lately. Doesn't Seem To Be The Case Thumbs Up For This Shit. it Was Gritty And Thoughtful And While u CAN Put Punchlines in a Drop Like This, it Hardly Ever Works Out So Good Job.

If theres a chance I`ll take it like a cancer patient <-- Got The Simple Witty Shit in There as Usual i See, Since ive Read Quite a Bit Of ur Shit, id Say This Was ur Strongest Point.

Now im kinda like an x ray.....just lookin for a break <-- Haha.

While The Whole Verse Was Sick, The Second Half Was The Best Half. i Don't Think ive Seen u Write Anything Metaphorical Before But u Pulled it Off And id Like To See u Drop More Metaphorical Shit.

the metaphors are dope
the multies are flowed well
really helped this piece
aint seen you drop ina while
nice comeback piece u never lose it

This the encapsulation of an emancipation
With a handsome face im like Manson/Jason
If theres a chance I`ll take it like a cancer patient

dope flow
the vocab was nice in this piece aswell
keep'em comin

appreciate the feed

Yeah this is cool, my only thing was i didnt like how the 3rd line didnt rhyme with the 4th, kinda threw me off, nah mean ?

anyways, like what was already said, strong flow, good vocab, content is nice.

one more time like Daft Punk