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Darth Vader
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Whatever You Want

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They say that ninety seven percent of the world's population/
accumultes three percent of money circulating/
Illuminati, on my mind thoughts soul n body/
They prob'ly - working with aliens n trading hobbies/
They prob'ly - watching me now through they satellites/
petabytes, terabytes - it's all into the dead of night/
(~PAUSE~) N Damn I want some head tonight/
I got the feeling that the world just could end tonight/
N I don't care if that makes you sad - if you bent or not/
cuz you vent a lot - you lil' bitch-like mental block/
suck a cock - and I don't feel your weak flow/
you could see my heat glow/
you ain't in the sequel/
you died in the prequel/
(~PAUSE~) See D. Vader knows people/
Uptown downtown, I do it for my peoplez/
N you can call it whatever you want/
conspiracy theories or a government front/
as I lay back, I just smoke my blunt/
contemplating what to eat for lunch, you little cunt/
I make a situation, get ugly though/
worse sounds than your dumb bitch style empty flow/
empty clips, you perform at an empty show/
empty mind, your pockets filled with that empty dough/
I spit fire, smoke circles 'round these empty hoes/
NBA, ballin' money makin' hits, lenghty scrolls/
From the city of the Jays, Tom Henke throws/
Joe Carter, Back To Back wins - N plenty 'dro...


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Re: Whatever You Want

Post by insTRUmental »

yo, this piece was pretty good ...
rhyme scheme was consistant most of the time.

good use of multis ...

one crtiticism i would have tho is that,
i didnt really know what the heel you were talkin about.
one bar didnt ncessarily have to do with the next or the last,
just kind of all over the place ...

it was over all a good read tho,
keep it up
semoC yaW sihT dekciW gnihtmoS nehW redruM ydoolB

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Post by K KiLLaH »

yo this shit was nice lmao its like ur talking on the track im feeling the flow n the swag of the track the flow reminds me of eminems "stan" but yeah you ur getting slept on but dont worry i'll help you out
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