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im on grind mode (StunT) wat niggas used to
Hot boy to the feds im more viewed den youtube
im O.G dope B hoes know me
(make it Rain ) ya bitch been drenched since 03
gwappin now six figures wen i let dis pen go
got a clip doe and stay bussin lyke a nympho
i keep it gutta gotta flow lyke a 6-4
u aint seen no cake wen u rap WAT U SPIT FO
and wat dez bitches here fo
dez bitches aint legit doe unless dey fuckin wit my kinfolk
rick got swagger finese at a all time
out da trap 20 minutes later its ball tyme
im ridin so haters wanna see a fed stop
MONICA LEWINSKY for presidents(GWAAAAP) i give head shots


sum slight shyt to start off wit
FEED

If you're really making 6 figures, I suggest you buy a ghost writer. No hate, just my opinion.

haha are yee a text battler?

if this was for real a freestyle then its not to bad but around here multis and metas are huge if u spit lil wayne stuff around here u will get clowned on but like i said if its a freestyle not bad but if it isnt u got room for improvement

TheRuckus wrote:If you're really making 6 figures, I suggest you buy a ghost writer. No hate, just my opinion.

^^Word..

lol yea it was off da top .. i aint really a multi and metaphor kind of rapper .. i mean not everyone got tha same style .. but i mean i dont kno y a nigga would disrespect if i aint say nuffin disrespectful to them

cuz thats wat dey do

Right, people do have different styles, I acknowledge that. And yes, I think yours is:

a)played
b)bland
c)boring
d)too basic

But just like everyone has different styles, everyone has different opinions. That's mine. Cats have made millions with the style you have, so yes it appeals to some people. And if your goal is to conform to the industry "standards" (or lack thereof) you are heading in the right direction. However, I'm not impressed by it. If you find that disrespectful, maybe you should take a good look in the mirror and ask yourself why your idea of success is based solely on others opinion of you. Even if this is a "freestyle", it doesn't change my opinion. You have no way of proving it even is a freestyle so I don't know why yall bring it up. You cats use the term freestyle as a gimmick to get away with wack rhymes. Here's my tip to you: Stay active, expand your mind, step your game up. I never said you suck, I just think you have more in you and you're not letting it out. Don't get it twisted, we all were in this spot at one point in time. Stay up.

i can digg that .. i respect that

they don't think that ur making money like how you said you were in ur rhymes thats why they are hating on you they think u are fake

they don't think that ur making money like how you said you were in ur rhymes thats why they are hating on you they think u are fake

this is tru^^^^

As far as fundemental lyricsl skill goes...
This shit was straight, nothing exceptionally ill,
Yet nothing extremely whack, some decent shit.
A couple punchlines had some potential... Just keep
Elevating and developing your style, def. stick with
It, you have mad potential, keep writing...

K KiLLaH wrote:they don't think that ur making money like how you said you were in ur rhymes thats why they are hating on you they think u are fake

uh huh

Phasewon wrote:As far as fundemental lyricsl skill goes...
This shit was straight, nothing exceptionally ill,
Yet nothing extremely whack, some decent shit.
A couple punchlines had some potential... Just keep
Elevating and developing your style, def. stick with
It, you have mad potential, keep writing...

thanks brah

i agree wit killah and ruckus... man this does appear to the mainstream crowd.... and yes i was at that point when i first started rhyming i used words like that and hyped myself up... i try to not use words and phrases like that but if i REALLY FREESTYLE outside the cpu i will use them when i hit a jogger... so everyone develops at their on pace... man it could take you a week it could take you a year.... but don't trip over wat ppl say just cuz they say ur bad do this look at them are they makin millions off their shit if not then y does it matter don't get down on urself and give up... call all this constructive cridisism...

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o and join up around here battle to help spread ur knowledge of rap look up ppl like NAS, RAKIM, JAY Z, don't be afraid to try new styles also join in on cypherin wit ppl around here thatll help you see wat other ppl do under pressure cuz no one has prewrittins in cyphers