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http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/murde ... ml#p120270


I spit the following to this beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5oijEjrLjJs It's Fabolous - Keep It Gangsta (Instrumental)


These days I stack more bread than your local bodega/
get more cheese than Jerry on the moon in a crater/
But I ain't Tom-like, I'm more Walter Cronkite/
spreadin' good news and my funeral catered/
You just a hater, I'll deal with you later/
I'd pop you now but I got some dough on the Lakers/
Slow on the chaser, but I'm fast with the paper/
I'm mask and the caper, you just broke n a raper/
hope and a dreamer, hopin' to toke in a beamer/
with an addict bitch, hopin' that she'll choke on yo weiner/
get in between her, maybe stick it in her, seed her/
have a crack child born from loathing Christina/
I Mix that green up, with gold seal hash bro/
not quite Castro, but lookin' at that cash grow/
that's what the stash for, I spit that crack raw/
not from Houston but I slug 'em like the Astros/
Snub 'em with the nickel nose, bleed 'em like a garden hose/
I harden hoes, pill 'em first, never pardon hoes/
I'm hot like fire being fed by destructive forces/
you should back up off me, and move extra cautious

for real not bad it flowed well but had some basic and simple rhymes but i was feelin it but wat was the point you kinda went from money to bettin money to wishin for money to smokin to gettin a bitch pregnent man just wasn't feelin the inconsistent theme... but the flow was good just try and expand more good shit

This shit was pretty ill, seemed to
fit well with the beat as well,

"These days I stack more bread than your local bodega/
get more cheese than Jerry on the moon in a crater/
But I ain't Tom-like, I'm more Walter Cronkite/
spreadin' good news and my funeral catered/
You just a hater, I'll deal with you later/
I'd pop you now but I got some dough on the Lakers/
Slow on the chaser, but I'm fast with the paper/
I'm mask and the caper, you just broke n a raper/"

^that whole opening was siccck, the rhyme switch ups
you demonstrated might go over alot of cats heads
who don't know how to recognize that shit, but I see
how you switched it up, which takes more structure skill
to do, props on that. stay dropping that heat homie.