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i Wrote This With The intentions Of it Being Open To Everyone's individual interpretation. i Had My Own Reason For Writing it But it Can Be Taken in a Number Of Ways.


This wilderness I walk through's a rich ground for my senses
Seen it thousands of times, now it's a pound and I'm helpless
Waiting for a change to come cause I'm surrounded by fences
And all it takes is one motion to break the bounds up and end this
Shit just didn't jump out from it's box at me like it used to
Not taking anything for granted, just this shit that I'm used to
You could say I grew accustomed, flies buzz about your face
And you say fuck it and give up the chase, pulling out the race
You'll relax in this place nothing gets a second look
Then something penetrates the harmony and next you're shook
Straight to the core, and suddenly it's the start of a game
Senses buzzing, coiled and ready from my heart to my brain
Slow motion reaching out but my hands are like boulders
Should I chase it or wait for it to land on my shoulder ?
But if it doesn't will I ever get this fuckin chance again ?
Veins will fill with agonising pain that I can't contain
I wanna look back on past possibilities and tickets
And say I got what I wanted, go through the list and tick it
No more questions asked, mining the shit till it's dry
A victory, and opportunities are quick to go by
Shit sometimes I think I'd be better off if we never met
Then I look at you and know you're as good as it ever gets


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I already gave you feedback on MSN.

You can definitely see a metaphor that could be cut either way, a mixed metaphor, if you will. I'll let other people figure that one out.

A couple lines stood out, for some reason, the butter flies in your face, heart to the brain, and second look.

The inner rhymes carried the flow the whole time. Sometimes its more creative to not use a million multis, while still keeping the flow intact. Especially for people like us who have been doing it for years.

I liked it. It will probably have more meaning to you than the masses. It is a bit short.