Hip Hop Forum

Topic: Going through a divorce

8 Bars

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-- Sat Aug 15, 2009 4:29 am --

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-- Sat Aug 15, 2009 3:54 pm --

A meaningless feeling trapped between a floor and a ceiling
Tense moments seem less broken of a couple with poor meaning
But there's a loud silence that almost allowes violence
They banished history with absent chemistry, No more profound science
The rings, Hold a metaphor that's now wrecked and torn
To be together for forever and more now it's domestic war
Oppressed sex signifies a depressed complex
Erased love to hate one is like a surpressed convex
They jumped ships when they used to dance and bump hips
Something's amiss, An escape perhaps something to run with
Supposedly perfect but divorce had spoken the verdict
Tears from neither like seperation was overly urgent
Love lossed within a house of sin and sound is grim
Waves of emotions erupt now the ring is bound to swim
Atmosphere's cold while they sat in fear but still bold
Spoke ill to hold will to realize they killed the untold

Strolling across the states river bridge feeling depression and hate painting pictures in your head of

love lost sorrow and pain, blood shed has covered your hands and clothing as your lives flashes before your

eyes then u realize what u have gain and lost for the first time the cost of fame and fortune compared to the

portion of happiness that really mattered in ones life… slowly u walk across the bridge as the wind blows a

pleasant breeze against your face then u stop and look at what takes place the stars and the moon in this

clear and quiet night, so then u take a step up and over the ledge with closed eyes to feel the rush of

what could be a fatal ending tonight hands are trembling as the pain torments your heart and mind and

as divine as it sounds you open your eyes and take a step down reminiscing on the best times…the best times

before the worst filled in… the best times with his children


i didnt break it down but it works 8 for that ass off that top baby g/l

This is a close one.. I liked both of your verses. delivery (well what delivery you can get from a text battle) was good, rhymes were good. I dont really like a battle if its about something.. i like battles that attack eachother lol.

I cant really choose on this one cuz when i read them both reminded of my parents so they got to me the same.. even tho i think Meta had a little better rhymes.

Imma call this one a tie

~~Deciple~~

Meta Got Banned so give it to Bones.

Bones verse was dope anyway.