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5 bars ,no more than 40min time limit...

our verses in 40 mins aight

to try to explain how much you are lame,
I SAW SCRIPTS BETTER THEN YOURS ON A TUNA-CAN//
shits happens-LIKE YOU BEING JUDGE!!
IF BOOK HIT YOU IN THE HEAD YOU WOULDNT READ A PUNCH//
audio from you??only way youll make an tone--
IS WHEN I RIP YOU APART AND MAKE 6-BONES XYLOPHONE//
you and your verses??AM NOT FEELIN THAT SHITS,
YOU SOUND FUCKING WORSE THEN FRUTTY-LOOP MADE BEATS!!//
readin your scripts make me sick n TIRED,
it all looks RETARDED like your brain is REWIRED!!// .....

OK.......LMFAO

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Mr. P.t.r is a pussy traind rennegade
Got his panties in a rut because his flows push LEMONADE/

Its not my fault daddy kept it in and made’em gay/
Now u wanna come and play?”… ok BEN-gay/

Hop scotch? or jump rope?, u better off playing them/
Cause ill strangle u with that jump rope BITCH CHOKE!/

Jeffrey dommer turned POPE strait crack no SOAP/
Purest of the purest rappers YES-I-SPIT-COKE/

don’t ever get mad because my judg-in IS-dope/
And ya rappin IS-broke u should-of called GEI-CO/

i feel like P.T.R.-ins got this one

-- Thu Aug 20, 2009 2:13 pm --

Mr. P.t.r is a pussy traind rennegade
Got his panties in a rut because his flows push LEMONADE/
not a big fan of first push lemonade flows
Its not my fault daddy kept it in and made’em gay/
Now u wanna come and play?”… ok BEN-gay/
i dont get the reference to your dad and making him gay and then that you want them to come play its like hearing michael jackson talk
Hop scotch? or jump rope?, u better off playing them/
Cause ill strangle u with that jump rope BITCH CHOKE!/
the lines b4 got me thinking of possible pedofiles so im reading hop scotch and jump rope in a crazy stalker way playgrounds and killing people is just a subject i dont relate to
Jeffrey dommer turned POPE strait crack no SOAP/
Purest of the purest rappers YES-I-SPIT-COKE/
really dont get either of these
don’t ever get mad because my judg-in IS-dope/
And ya rappin IS-broke u should-of called GEI-CO/
this is a better bar but i feel like the use of gei-co is forced
these are my opinions ive seen some of your other stuff and you can definatly do alot better than this.


to try to explain how much you are lame,r]
I SAW SCRIPTS BETTER THEN YOURS ON A TUNA-CAN//
eh.. kinda hard to convince me that can and lame rhyme unless you saying CANE and if you are thats really too forced i feel
shits happens-LIKE YOU BEING JUDGE!!
IF BOOK HIT YOU IN THE HEAD YOU WOULDNT READ A PUNCH//
i think the judge -> book to head is good but read the punch just seems out of place in the line but you got the right idea here
audio from you??only way youll make an tone--
IS WHEN I RIP YOU APART AND MAKE 6-BONES XYLOPHONE//
this line is pretty funny to me so kudos to that good line
you and your verses??AM NOT FEELIN THAT SHITS,
YOU SOUND FUCKING WORSE THEN FRUTTY-LOOP MADE BEATS!!//
eh i cant make shits and beats rhyme
readin your scripts make me sick n TIRED,
it all looks RETARDED like your brain is REWIRED!!//
this bars ok i kinda relate to it by the fact that you typed your shit so crazy so it really is like your brains rewired keep writing you have good ideas but still kinks

my vote: P.T.R.-ins

wtf? lol my dad? ur readings is off pimp thats third person speech in this battle aight? now go from there because the verses do connect,

still not a fan of come play --> bengay unless like you through something about being sore better get some bengay etc. just my opinions here i dont like that bar with the gay-play-bengay that much. keep droppin

P.T.R
to try to explain how much you are lame,
I SAW SCRIPTS BETTER THEN YOURS ON A TUNA-CAN//
no multis and da punch was weak and i can catch ur swag i kno ur tryna say cane... 1/5
shits happens-LIKE YOU BEING JUDGE!!
IF BOOK HIT YOU IN THE HEAD YOU WOULDNT READ A PUNCH//
ur flow was off and this had good protentional but man it just wasnt worded right so 1/5
audio from you??only way youll make an tone--
IS WHEN I RIP YOU APART AND MAKE 6-BONES XYLOPHONE//
flow was off due to no multis u need dem but nice personal and name play 3/5
you and your verses??AM NOT FEELIN THAT SHITS,
YOU SOUND FUCKING WORSE THEN FRUTTY-LOOP MADE BEATS!!//
NO this didn't even match up and da punch made no since 1/5
readin your scripts make me sick n TIRED,
it all looks RETARDED like your brain is REWIRED!!//
ok you didn't really make much since wit dis punch 1/5

total 7/25
yo you need to use multis if you don't kno wat they are ask someone... and you have potential try and look around read da paper absorb stuff to make into punches

bones
Mr. P.t.r is a pussy traind rennegade
Got his panties in a rut because his flows push LEMONADE/
um can someone say forced as shit dam man any way you had a multi but punch made no since 1/5
Its not my fault daddy kept it in and made’em gay/
Now u wanna come and play?”… ok BEN-gay/
try to make a multi forced it and da punch was weak this was weak for a filler 1/5
Hop scotch? or jump rope?, u better off playing them/
Cause ill strangle u with that jump rope BITCH CHOKE!/
ok repeative and no punch at all i don't care about you doin this to him and doin dat to him make me laugh dats wat u wana do 1/5
Jeffrey dommer turned POPE strait crack no SOAP/
Purest of the purest rappers YES-I-SPIT-COKE/
dahmer lmao hypen urself up is not a punch this is sumtin you would put this in a song not a battle 1/5
don’t ever get mad because my judg-in IS-dope/
And ya rappin IS-broke u should-of called GEI-CO/
flow was a lil weak no and you tried for a good punch came up short tho 2/5

total 6/25

first off WTF bones ive seen you drop some good shit and then all of a sudden you dropped dat... dat.... yo man must of ur lines where fillers dat could be n a song not a battle first tip dont try and say im so good i do this like in ur coke line or talk about choken da dude like ur jump rope dats not maken me laugh so stop man

votep.t.r

to try to explain how much you are lame,
I SAW SCRIPTS BETTER THEN YOURS ON A TUNA-CAN//

2/5 Wasnt feeling this. I didnt like the visuals you were trying to give.


shits happens-LIKE YOU BEING JUDGE!!
IF BOOK HIT YOU IN THE HEAD YOU WOULDNT READ A PUNCH//

0/5 This didnt make sense at all.

audio from you??only way youll make an tone--
IS WHEN I RIP YOU APART AND MAKE 6-BONES XYLOPHONE//

4/5 Much better. LOL. I laughed off this

you and your verses??AM NOT FEELIN THAT SHITS,
YOU SOUND FUCKING WORSE THEN FRUTTY-LOOP MADE BEATS!!//

0/5 umm ^^ WTF?

readin your scripts make me sick n TIRED,
it all looks RETARDED like your brain is REWIRED!!//

1/5 Not a great closer. But was aight.




Mr. P.t.r is a pussy traind rennegade
Got his panties in a rut because his flows push LEMONADE/

1/5 Horrid opener not hard at all.

Its not my fault daddy kept it in and made’em gay/
Now u wanna come and play?”… ok BEN-gay/

1/5 Played out ideas. Not original at all

Hop scotch? or jump rope?, u better off playing them/
Cause ill strangle u with that jump rope BITCH CHOKE!/

0/5 What are we in the third grade again? Lame

Jeffrey dommer turned POPE strait crack no SOAP/
Purest of the purest rappers YES-I-SPIT-COKE/

2/5 This was a bit better. At least it seems like you are trying here.

don’t ever get mad because my judg-in IS-dope/
And ya rappin IS-broke u should-of called GEI-CO/

1/5 Just like PTR not a great closer.


PTR = 7/25
Bone = 5/25.


My vote is PTR, by a cunt hair!!

3-0 for mister (P.T.R) me
can we close this now

-- Thu Aug 27, 2009 11:35 pm --

close this shit plz

-- Thu Aug 27, 2009 11:39 pm --

c;ose n update plz

-records updated-

-battle closed-