Gone...

[The Gonz]

Yo I've got some shit on my chest...

It's been the wildest course, so many smiles were forced/
Child support always scared me so I never filed divorce/
In the past I would split but came back for the kids/
Never broke my heart but you never quit cracking my ribs/
I've had it with this, I've been hurting for years/
This isn't working, my purpose has been perfectly clear/
What's worse is all the times you swore you would change/
I never forced you, but every war I was the source you would blame/
Always the scapegoat for all the problems we faced/
Every promise erased so now your honesty's fake/
Any trust was pryed, asked me to brush aside/
Your mistakes when you think your actions were justified/
I've had enough with lies, forget the sickness and health/
Now you're the victim, you did this shit to yourself/
I hope the friction is felt, your love was see-through/
Walking on eggshells wasn't enough to please you/
Thought I was stuck beneath you but escaped your cold workings/
You admit you were wrong but its too late for soul searching/
Now you're desperate saying that I'm leaving the kids/
When you've treated this family like it didn't even exist/
You keep pleading and wish I'd feed your delusions/
Crying on webcam cuz now you see what you're losin/
There's no easy solution, but the decision is made/
I have more respect for myself than to live in this cage/
Its over...

[Momeijah]

k im Gonna Just Break it Down Because i Can't Be Assed Leaving Feed, Then Pasting Each individual Line With My Comments On it. 1st Of All it Was a Typical Ruckus Rhymescheme, 4 Multis Per Bar With a Pristine Flow. ive Also Noticed Some Similarities With Me in That u Prefer Going For The 4 Syllable Multis. i Always Just Have The Same Rhythm in My Head When i Write (Unless it's To a Beat) And My Flow (While Different in Each Drop) is Compatible With it, And 4 Syllable Multis Are Perfect For The Job. (i Donno if u Do This Too, Do u ?)

Anywhom...

Yo I've got some shit on my chest...

It's been the wildest course, so many smiles were forced/
Child support always scared me so I never filed divorce/

Good Opening Bar Giving Away What The Drop Was About in a Nutshell.

In the past I would split but came back for the kids/
Never broke my heart but you never quit cracking my ribs/

i Liked The Perspective Here, How u Made it Literal in a Sense.

I've had it with this, I've been hurting for years/
This isn't working, my purpose has been perfectly clear/

Good Flow.

What's worse is all the times you swore you would change/
I never forced you, but every war I was the source you would blame/

THAT Was One Of The Best Bars, i Think Most People Can Relate To That. Chicks in Denial Of Their Own Mistakes, Shitty Deal Lol. The Whole Bar Ties Together Brilliant And Makes Perfect Sense, it's Good u Got That One Point Across in a Bar.

Always the scapegoat for all the problems we faced/
Every promise erased so now your honesty's fake/

Yup.

Any trust was pryed, asked me to brush aside/
Your mistakes when you think your actions were justified/

The Flow Was iffy Here, Still Made a Good Point.

I've had enough with lies, forget the sickness and health/
Now you're the victim, you did this shit to yourself/

Once Again, i Think Everyone Can Relate To This in Someway.

I hope the friction is felt, your love was see-through/
Walking on eggshells wasn't enough to please you/

Word.

Thought I was stuck beneath you but escaped your cold workings/
You admit you were wrong but its too late for soul searching/

This Sounds a Bit Like a Stern Telling-Off in Rap Form Lol.

Now you're desperate saying that I'm leaving the kids/
When you've treated this family like it didn't even exist/

i Know Dudes Who Have Had The Same Situation Lmao, Chicks Pulling The Kid Card.

You keep pleading and wish I'd feed your delusions/
Crying on webcam cuz now you see what you're losin/

People Usually Want Others To Confirm That Their imaginary Problems Are Real, This Bar Was Good Because it Provided an Example Too.

There's no easy solution, but the decision is made/
I have more respect for myself than to live in this cage/
Its over...

Word, Dope Ending.

[-MenaCe-]

Wow.

Thats some deep shit ruck. As usual all ya word play and all that shit is nice and thats what i call a fair well letter you must be serious about this. and i wanna kno, Are you gonna say this to her? or have you allready



Overall the drop was ill. Good Shyt

[The Gonz]

Already been said, papers are drawn, I just need to sign em. Preciate the feed, though. But yeah, this shit was fairly easy to write because most of it is shit I already said to her.

[Dynamiq]

word this is deep my man. shows that you are dedicated to your writing.

i would quote some lines but i'd basically be quoting the whole thing.

keep this up man u have a good talent with it.

[JHaze]

It's been the wildest course, so many smiles were forced/
Child support always scared me so I never filed divorce/
In the past I would split but came back for the kids/
Never broke my heart but you never quit cracking my ribs/
I've had it with this, I've been hurting for years/
This isn't working, my purpose has been perfectly clear/

nice intro

What's worse is all the times you swore you would change/
I never forced you, but every war I was the source you would blame/
Always the scapegoat for all the problems we faced/
Every promise erased so now your honesty's fake/

niiice flow here

Any trust was pryed, asked me to brush aside/
Your mistakes when you think your actions were justified/
I've had enough with lies, forget the sickness and health/
Now you're the victim, you did this shit to yourself/

good shit man

I hope the friction is felt, your love was see-through/
Walking on eggshells wasn't enough to please you/
Thought I was stuck beneath you but escaped your cold workings/
You admit you were wrong but its too late for soul searching/
Now you're desperate saying that I'm leaving the kids/
When you've treated this family like it didn't even exist/
You keep pleading and wish I'd feed your delusions/
Crying on webcam cuz now you see what you're losin/
There's no easy solution, but the decision is made/
I have more respect for myself than to live in this cage/
Its over...

niiiiice closer

you this is dope honestly sick flow all the way throughout, emotion n content was perfect, sick nothing else to say

[complexity]

Excellent drop. One of the better story tellers on the site, gives us another perspective into his life. Probably the best story teller actually.

The metaphors were mostly on point, the flow was consistent throughout the drop, it was a pleasure to read.

Big ups.

[Haz]

Its Over!! ...


LMAO.. That Was Raw As Fuck... Way To Express yaself , Kill it N Maintain a Crazy Flow...

Good Drop Famo .. Keep Droppin

[MOEstradamus]

this is by far my favorite peice u've dropped great shit bro keep it up

[TreTru]

ahh what is there to feed?..shyt's hot your alway's consistent with your flow and multies..i'm also feelin this concept it kinda matches an original song i recvorded yesterday , too bad you dont do audio or i'd throw you on it....

Good Ass Drop Ruck....1

[EvilJoey]

Always Droping fire

Deep / Sick / Fire!

always a fresh start each time u come back from Iraq

[TreTru]

^^
speakin of wich we made this original track for our original album...called "Chronicles of a Soldier"
anyway..i can't wait for ya'll to hear it..it's a tribute to all Veterans especially Iraq vet's ..1

[Borat]

Alotta emotion in this! Let me guess you wrote this in like less than 10 mins? That's usually how it goes for me... its like you connect your heart to your pen and dive into the paper and this shit shows up when you pull up for air. You can open yourself up and that takes a lot. Good shit mate

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[The Gonz]

Thought this drop is still fresh enough to co-exist with my latest drops. Again, thanks for the feedback everyone.