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I grab what I have Im tryna make it the best
look past what I lack, and just pray that im blessed
put life in paragraphs I aint waitin' for death
the years feel like chapters how many pages are left
and everyday i progress i feel the end approachin'
the twist of it is I aint got the pen that wrote it
God is the author Im a part in the script
I was headed for success the plot started to switch
find it hard to commit rhymes harder to spit
stuttering i'm cluttered cuz my minds all in this shit
i know my destination but cant wait im so impatient
the love feels great but the hate is motivation
but I have to be clear I aint ask to be here
around passion and fear as catastrophe nears
anotha death brings tragedy just imagine the tears
theres no stallin your fallin ill just let gravity steer

Third verse to an audio track i have, lemme know what you think

heres the audio if ur interested
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default ... dID=978546

I like this piece. The multies and rhyme schemes were good, the flow was nice except for the so impatient/ motivation line, I had to read it a couple different ways to find a flow that made the whole multi work. Other than pretty solid man.

and everyday i progress i feel the end approachin'
the twist of it is I aint got the pen that wrote it

Favorite line, shit was nice.

Nice drop, short but nice.


Good Ish keep em comin.

thanks for the feed yall, bump