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pretend ya sick, but ya dead before i finish this
call me a feminist but my opinion is 'men' aint shit
im flyer wit the lines i spit, my style is sick
im the type to put u in a box, just by thinkin outside of it
i be bringin silence bitch. and the news is son lost
his flows mad shitty, like a river wit a sewage runoff
me? im just flowin for days, growin colder with age
his bitch said she dont smoke, but i keep her blowin on haze
demonstrate the hate, ill show you what my knuckles do
and after i snap that neck... things wont be 'lookin up' for you
ya sigs tight, a flamin' mic, thats that bomb shit
but your fire is only burnin still cuz u keep throwin garbage on it

Listen!!




Take a Second N remember i diss bitches and smack Hoes i cant Respect This Skank..
i'll run ya whole ciy this kids Flow is shitty like it was Constructed in a Septic Tank!!..
All ya dudes shoulda warned that when it comes to my hits thats the shit You Should Absorb..
Fuk it even Use and Adore cause on this stage imma get in "J's" way like lil mama at the Music Awards!!..
Stop dead in ya tracks all movement is held at a stand still i dont wanna hear shit that this Man Kills.
Cause the truth of the matter is the only time he's on top of his game is when standin on a Land Fill!!..
Bunch ah garbage underneath this coward that makes him feel that he actually Contains Intelligence..
When infact he's as Lame as ever been And a fukin retart got a bigger Brain then you ever did!!..
Why try for this loser there's no point or any type of legitimate Reason To Burn Thoughts..
Been a bitch since ya first cough still aint find ya swag and we can tell ya needin to Search More!!..
Its like a shit load of spears when i reach back and aim for tha heart N start to throw Rhymes At You..
You design facts fool! and i'll put you in the ground wit all ya shit quiker then a Times Capsule!!..

pretend ya sick, but ya dead before i finish this
call me a feminist but my opinion is 'men' aint shit

^Good opener, nice name play

im flyer wit the lines i spit, my style is sick
im the type to put u in a box, just by thinkin outside of it

^Good

i be bringin silence bitch. and the news is son lost
his flows mad shitty, like a river wit a sewage runoff

^Lol punch made me chuckle

me? im just flowin for days, growin colder with age
his bitch said she dont smoke, but i keep her blowin on haze

^Nice

demonstrate the hate, ill show you what my knuckles do
and after i snap that neck... things wont be 'lookin up' for you

^Good wordplay

ya sigs tight, a flamin' mic, thats that bomb shit
but your fire is only burnin still cuz u keep throwin garbage on it

^Eh, wasn't feelin this one.



Take a Second N remember i diss bitches and smack Hoes i cant Respect This Skank..
i'll run ya whole ciy this kids Flow is shitty like it was Constructed in a Septic Tank!!..

^Okay opener. Haze already used a "shitty flow" punch so this seemed kinda redundant.

All ya dudes shoulda warned that when it comes to my hits thats the shit You Should Absorb..
Fuk it even Use and Adore cause on this stage imma get in "J's" way like lil mama at the Music Awards!!..

^Lol good nameplay.

Stop dead in ya tracks all movement is held at a stand still i dont wanna hear shit that this Man Kills.
Cause the truth of the matter is the only time he's on top of his game is when standin on a Land Fill!!..

^Nice

Bunch ah garbage underneath this coward that makes him feel that he actually Contains Intelligence..
When infact he's as Lame as ever been And a fukin retart got a bigger Brain then you ever did!!..

^Not feelin it.

Why try for this loser there's no point or any type of legitimate Reason To Burn Thoughts..
Been a bitch since ya first cough still aint find ya swag and we can tell ya need to Search More!!..

^Nope, not feeling that either.

Its like a shit load of spears when i reach back and aim for tha heart N start to throw Rhymes At You..
You design facts fool! and i'll put you in the ground wit all ya shit quiker then a Times Capsule!!..

^Eh, this was alright. Coulda been worded better.


This was a good battle. Both brought some nice punches. Some could be played, I wouldn't know, I don't fuck with battles much. Anyways, down to the cats..

Flow: JHaze by a landslide. His shit sounds audio-ready. Menace is still on that million word long line text battle shit.

Punches: JHaze by a hair. It was real close but Menace had a couple that I wasn't quite feeling so the edge goes to J.

Nameplay: Tie. Both didn't use nearly as much as I'd like to see in a battle, I prefer nameplays over generic punches anyday. Both had a nice one each.

Multies: Tie. Both used em well. Menace had a couple iffy end rhymes, but had some nice rhyme schemes to smooth it out.

Enjoyment: Tie. Both verses were well crafted. Generic to an extent, but good nonetheless. Definitely a nice ass battle.

Vote: JHaze

1-0 J Uppin!..

Wats funny is i didn't even read his verse and we both said sumthin bout a shitty flow..LOL ( im feelin mine more tho)

Multies:Menace
Flow:JHaze
Punches:Menace

Vote-Menace

1-1 uppiiiiiin lets get it

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pretend ya sick, but ya dead before i finish this
call me a feminist but my opinion is 'men' aint shit

average opener, decent wordplay

im flyer wit the lines i spit, my style is sick
im the type to put u in a box, just by thinkin outside of it

not bad

i be bringin silence bitch. and the news is son lost
his flows mad shitty, like a river wit a sewage runoff

i like the concept but mad shitty? i dont like

me? im just flowin for days, growin colder with age
his bitch said she dont smoke, but i keep her blowin on haze

sick

demonstrate the hate, ill show you what my knuckles do
and after i snap that neck... things wont be 'lookin up' for you

this killed it

ya sigs tight, a flamin' mic, thats that bomb shit
but your fire is only burnin still cuz u keep throwin garbage on it

the concept is good but was hard hitting

nice verse with sum good idea jus need to get em hitting harder




Take a Second N remember i diss bitches and smack Hoes i cant Respect This Skank..
i'll run ya whole ciy this kids Flow is shitty like it was Constructed in a Septic Tank!!..


i dunno if this was alredy written b4 j dropped, good concept but j used it so hard to judge


All ya dudes shoulda warned that when it comes to my hits thats the shit You Should Absorb..
Fuk it even Use and Adore cause on this stage imma get in "J's" way like lil mama at the Music Awards!!..

too much filler, ure bars are too stretched, nice punch tho

Stop dead in ya tracks all movement is held at a stand still i dont wanna hear shit that this Man Kills.
Cause the truth of the matter is the only time he's on top of his game is when standin on a Land Fill!!..

nice, too stretched again but good punch

Bunch ah garbage underneath this coward that makes him feel that he actually Contains Intelligence..
When infact he's as Lame as ever been And a fukin retart got a bigger Brain then you ever did!!..

shit imo

Why try for this loser there's no point or any type of legitimate Reason To Burn Thoughts..
Been a bitch since ya first cough still aint find ya swag and we can tell ya needin to Search More!!..


all filler no punch

Its like a shit load of spears when i reach back and aim for tha heart N start to throw Rhymes At You..
You design facts fool! and i'll put you in the ground wit all ya shit quiker then a Times Capsule!!..

design facts fool--nah mate. and i dont get the puch

over all ur verse was decent but too much forced rhyming and filler imo, cut the filler shorten ur bars and improve ur flow it will hit harder


overall decent battle but j takes this one easy

2-1 J Uppin!!

uppin

Alright, I read through this twice before posting just to make sure I was being fair...
Jhaze, you had some flow... nice opener wit the name play "Men-ain't-shit" ( a little risky but you pulled it off).. the flamin/garbage line almost lost it for you... until....

... i tried to flow off of Menace's
couldn't get it with it.. damn near twisted my tongue up... the entire flow seemed forced just to get the punchlines through.. you can't sacrafice the flow of the rhyme just to try to get funny with words. They gotta compliment each other... you had some funny shit, but i couldn't put it together... (could be just me)

so I'll go with J-haze

Riggz

3-1 uppin

-- Thu Nov 19, 2009 4:09 pm --

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