Hip Hop Forum

Yo ~ i dont just talk the talk, i walk it,
Thats why i hold bats, knifes and gun kit~
The Ends ~ there heptic, ur stlyes distorted,
Like ya bitch got raped and shes keepin the baby ~ insteada gettin it aborted!
I talk morbid, Just to make ya feel awkward ,
Im just a part of life, No ya cant ignore it ~
Like when you hold somethin preshus,
Cause your dead gran bought ya it!
Im torture's, S0o sadistic,
A mother fuckin terrorist ~ Leave ya body twisted!

Honestly, this was wack. For one, I'm a little surprised you were able to spell awkward but not precious. But spelling aside, the rhymes were basic as hell, the flow was decent though for the most part. It was too short, half of it didn't even rhyme. I highly suggest stepping your text game up if you plan on battling on this site. I'd hate to see someone with a big goose egg in the W column and I can guarantee that's what would be the outcome if you bring this level of rhyming.

... Unless this is some kind of joke...

yea honestly man its just real basic, work on your rhymes bro, try put a little more thought into what you want to say

Like JHaze and Ruckus said, it's a little basic, work on your multies and your flow. Also, work on keeping things in the same rhyme sceme for the most part. Just keep practicing and you'll get much better in no time.