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Part one:http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/thoug ... 14369.html

Something you'd never get, most wish they didn't either
dark and lonely thoughts is what this sin'll feed ya
a tapeworm in the reasoning makes 'em collect
more and more regret, but's it's not the worst yet
sweating happy thoughts.....coughin' blood
loss of love....not as bad as the thoughts above
in the form of rain clouds, some forgot in the flood
can't make it to the boat, feet caught in the mud
the more thoughts, the more it's realized the choice locks
can't call for help, too much decay in the voice box
will this be the first or last life decision ever made?
no deadline, no guarantee in seven days
they call it selfish, the intelligent could plee
but they can't relate and don't need to be set free
revenge is sweet, or it pretends to be
it's never how the story really ends you see
always the satisfaction, never the reaction
the good hearted soul never is the one relaxin'
always the one feelin bad for the destruction
in the end though he's the only one who's really stuck
a hard choice, it doesn't matter who's lovein to stay
cause when emotion ever really come into play?
can't be seen, there''s really no time time to lose
life's a right, property, time to choose
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stumble around around, try to load up the bullets in
death metal it's called, the piece is now full of it
pull the hammer, it starts lookin a little familiar
this should be really easy for a villian, a killer
take a deep breath, and think about the logic
mind's empty, nothin but this deadly object
talk is cheap, but the choice won't be doin' the least
speakin from the heart, sincerely the newly deceased...

This is a story about a young killer and a battle with thoughts of suicide because of his concience and good heart. The last line said "speakin from the heart, sincerely the newly deceased" and implys more of his heart being dead so to speak and not going through with it...it seems like it may imply him actually killing himself...but hey, I wouldn't be typing this if this was the case.

Feed would be apprciated.

This is good stuff. I like the story, you had some good rhyme schemes and multies. The imagery was okay, could have been a bit better in my opinion. The flow was pretty solid from what I saw and could be made to audio fairly easily. I think this would make a nice track. Good drop, man.