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MAY I CRITIQUE YOU? - Don't get mad...

Posted: Sat Nov 07, 2009 12:05 am
by Riggz
It’s obvious, the-applause-I-get on ILLEST is muted
Diluted…
to forced word plays and multies that sound computed
This new-shit
Is similar to your generic disinfective
It only covers-up the smell of the trash, it don’t get-rid-of-it
You-silly-bitch
So confident, communing with your online entities
Hopin to find a friend in the chat, like it was meant-ta-be

No unique individuals… no new techniques
No character to your flow, no new critiques

Denying what you can’t comprehend, neither deliver
Arriving at a state of defense and won’t consider
Unless an ode is filled with similes, it don’t carry it’s weight?
Like a director without a symphony, it’s just mindless waves
Seven years and shit ain’t changed, it’s just degraded
The population got denser and individuality faded

Same names… new snitches
Same game… new bitches

All irrelevant in time, your style will fade away too
When Emeniem number three comes to a Site near you

So save your awards and your silly “gif” belts
Set you ablaze like Rison, and watch your stupid shit melt
I don’t need your praises, fuk, I built the game plan
Hold your applause… I’m a self made-man

Hook:
Hello there, how are you?
It’s really nice to meet you!
I’m an online rapper, I bet you I can beat you.
Hi there, how are you?
It’s really nice to see you!
Can you spare a punchline, that way I can critique you.


Yea, whatever.. i ain't going no where and I won't bow down to conformity.

It's pronounced Riggidy Raow (rhymes with WoW) for those who'd like to rebuttle and use name play.

Re: MAY I CRITIQUE YOU? - Don't get mad...

Posted: Tue Nov 10, 2009 9:50 am
by QwarterZ
okkkkkk

I'll critique you...
first get a better title
second defiance works....if your good at it
third don't get to emotional it messes with your writings
fourth you will die horribly
fifth so will I
sixth rebuttal that

Re: MAY I CRITIQUE YOU? - Don't get mad...

Posted: Tue Nov 10, 2009 3:45 pm
by JHaze
its not bad man but a lot of is kinda simple to be honest, like dont get me wrong some lines were real nice

Denying what you can’t comprehend, neither deliver
Arriving at a state of defense and won’t consider
Unless an ode is filled with similes, it don’t carry it’s weight?
Like a director without a symphony, it’s just mindless waves
Seven years and shit ain’t changed, it’s just degraded
The population got denser and individuality faded

i liked that whole part but the rest of it kinda wasnt up to par, its all good though man keep writin

Re: MAY I CRITIQUE YOU? - Don't get mad...

Posted: Wed Nov 11, 2009 1:01 am
by token jesture
Denying what you can’t comprehend, neither deliver
Arriving at a state of defense and won’t consider
Unless an ode is filled with similes, it don’t carry it’s weight?
Like a director without a symphony, it’s just mindless waves
Seven years and shit ain’t changed, it’s just degraded
The population got denser and individuality faded



riggz that ish was dope, and its fucking true especially the population denser n individuality fading its so true man

Re: MAY I CRITIQUE YOU? - Don't get mad...

Posted: Wed Nov 11, 2009 4:46 pm
by Arvincible
great message just needs more material to really hit the spot, but yeah its there.

you got some skillz rigg, i saw that battle verse you dropped on menace, that was pretty dope, we'll probably battle soon or havfe a collab or something

keep it up we need more talent here