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Mental Alertness #1 - Inspiration or Desperation?

Posted: Tue Nov 17, 2009 3:43 pm
by complexity
New series.
In life you need either Inspiration or Desperation
an old quote, I'm close to excessive dedication
eloping verbs, separating the hope from the unspoken word
I know, I can't control my urge
to write because the flow is an ocean, heard in the night
every emotion is perfectly typed
Inspired, by the awe, I search for its light
immersed with the bright
color that bursts and ignites
when I spit this verse on the mic
in the circus of life, I'm a lion
flying through the fire
maybe I'm an iris, seen through your eyelids
a-cute thoughts like miley cyrus
my styles a virus, I get inside your depths
when my dialect collides with text
our eyes connect, I smile, to disguise the threat
you'd drive to arrive at death, that's the surprise effect
you're not sly as complex, I'm amped up dog
morally bankrupt, and I don't plan to rob
banned like analogue
I'm a vandal, in the land of God
hip hop's a scandal, fuck the media power
I completely devour the stars like Meteour Showers
the Illest bars, I plan to get back to the basics
back when your favorite MC's were passionately debated
the craft has practically been wasted
I'm the master in the attic, not a rapper in a basement

Re: Mentally Alertness #1 - Inspiration or Desperation?

Posted: Tue Nov 17, 2009 6:53 pm
by The Gonz
Like home skillet above me said. Good stuff, but far from your best. The flow was fairly consistent, had some nice wordplay and rhyme schemes. Overall, this seemed almost lazy for you lol. Seemed more like you were writing to write, not really saying anything or trying anything new.

Re: Mentally Alertness #1 - Inspiration or Desperation?

Posted: Wed Nov 18, 2009 5:20 am
by -MenaCe-
Nice Drop Plex. You did ya thing once again with this one. 9/10

Re: Mental Alertness #1 - Inspiration or Desperation?

Posted: Wed Nov 18, 2009 8:01 am
by QwarterZ
when I spit this verse on the mic
in the circus of life, I'm a lion
flying through the fire
^^^^ that was dope, I kicked a lil' somethin' like that....maybe I'll drop it

either way this was dope especially the way you structured it some nice shit! keep writing!

Re: Mental Alertness #1 - Inspiration or Desperation?

Posted: Wed Nov 18, 2009 8:07 am
by Haz
Don't you hate When People Say Far From ya Best ?? Like " Whats My Best?, Can you Pin Point It ???" lmao ..

Anyways I Liked This yo , The First Line Reminded Me Of a Theoro Poem ..

when my dialect collides with text
our eyes connect, I smile, to disguise the threat
you'd drive to arrive at death, that's the surprise effect
you're not sly as complex, I'm amped up dog
morally bankrupt, and I don't plan to rob
banned like analogue
I'm a vandal, in the land of God

This was Def my favorite Part other Then The First Few Lines,
Liked How you put your Words Together , Multis On Point

I'm the master in the attic, not a rapper in a basement

LMMFAO ! .. Joe Budden .. I'm a Student Of a Game Not a Teachers Pet.

Good Shit ..

Re: Mental Alertness #1 - Inspiration or Desperation?

Posted: Wed Nov 18, 2009 8:23 am
by complexity
I'll take all of the comments into consideration and appreciate the feedback. I would have to agree with Ruckus, I kind of was writing for the sake of writing, the point of the drop is to go off a quote written by someone else and just spit on that topic.