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Plex

most kids quit school, to rap n be cool
eventually become fools, to drugs dey aint true
most rappers r trapped , in a cell, dwell in the darkness
in hell they swell, to the point they blow up n sell their selves
my heart races, so fast a pace maker would blow up
i stand still wit a BPM of a 100 n throw up
so wat? my stress
takes control of me, leavin pains in my chest
ive yet to let anyone get a hold of me, i go to sleep while stayin awake
wen i wake up my body aches
it takes more than some pills to keep calm
my palms sweat more than a runner on the last mile of a marathon
no beat all the snares r gone, my feet bare n the stairs r long
their deep in where the scare is strong
i keep sinnin till my hair is long
like jesus ima bare a cross

(Don't take my shit literally)

The cameras on? I shine, the new paragon, even in prime time, I'm very calm
prepare a bomb, declare Islam like Farrakhan, my antics embarrass mom
the beat is weak, but the snare is strong, all of this stress on the body
makes you want to set a bomb at a step of mall, or on a desk in a lobby
I can't do this professionally, maybe it can be left as a hobby
this weapon is probably going to get me arrested, I suggest you assault me
I'm infected like zombies, bring a wave of death, I have more success than tsunamis
excellent, tshong = ekoms, he was the one who inspired this newly released song
evil geniuses know how to put the heat on, throw viral in the mix, we are three strong
we created the blueprint, time for it to be redrawn, the fatigues gone
we have our ears to the streets just keep calm, we will hear it, if you even breathe wrong
its impossible, to defeat com-plexity, in reality, your death is long adieu
it won't take a whole song to murder you, if I drop 16 bars, respond with 32
or find the biggest monster to challenge me, I have a suicidal bombers mentality
when it comes to battling, I conquer reality like the andrometer galaxy right Alex?

the beat is weak, but the snare is strong, all of this stress on the body
makes you want to set a bomb at a step of mall, or on a desk in a lobby
I can't do this professionally, maybe it can be left as a hobby

^^^^ That's how I feel this was a strong piece both y'all came with some different views but kept it real

I was really feelin' this piece

ive yet to let anyone get a hold of me, i go to sleep while stayin awake
wen i wake up my body aches
it takes more than some pills to keep calm
my palms sweat more than a runner on the last mile of a marathon
^^^^ That right there was dope aswell keep writing!

Nice Drops from Both. I was feelin the whole thing




Fav Lines:


Viral:
"it takes more than some pills to keep calm
my palms sweat more than a runner on the last mile of a marathon"

Plex:
"we created the blueprint, time for it to be redrawn, the fatigues gone
we have our ears to the streets just keep calm, we will hear it, if you even breathe wrong"




Good Job Guys!!

I think Plex outshined on this one... with deep metaphores like the beat/snare, zombies/tsunomi etc...
however, I will give this one piece of critisizm--you weren't consistent on the subject as Viral was. First you deep and emotional on some self deprivation shit... then you start droppin emcees with 24 bars and 32 replies..didn't take away from your flow, but it strayed from where you were going.

I enjoy Viral's audios more than I do his writtens. Only because I think he writes about the same way he spits which in text seems a little simplified (less enjoyable of a read); however I feel the same way about Menace...blah I've said too much already.

Keep droppin'

Riggz

Viral's verse started below average, then picked up and ended up to be a nice piece, plex's was very good, nice multi and good job keepin on subject and not just using rhyme fillers.

Good drop guys.

this is gay....lol...not sure y u posted this....that shit took me like 4 minutes...haha...thats y i only do audio...it looks like one big choppy run on sentence...hahaha...ur shit was coo tho...now lets do an audio....LOL...thatll be the day

Sorry, Viral. I thought that I made it clear I was going to post it. If it makes you feel any better, I thought that verse was dope whether it was for audio or not.

Especially for how quick you typed it up.

First off, these lines stood out to me even though the entirety of both verses was dope.

Viral:
it takes more than some pills to keep calm
my palms sweat more than a runner on the last mile of a marathon

Plex:
its impossible, to defeat com-plexity, in reality, your death is long adieu
it won't take a whole song to murder you, if I drop 16 bars, respond with 32

even though I agree that the last part of Plex's verse didn't really stay on topic but was still legit.

Well, Ekoms messaged me, and I wanted to include his name into the written. Obviously, according to the feedback, that was a huge mistake, and I should have continued with the theme that I established in the first few bars, thanks for the feedback, I won't say that I didn't notice it at all, but I didn't think it was that annoying. It surely won't be precedent, I really appreciate the feedback.

o plex flow had me trippin ish was nice first bars killed it for me V ya shit was tough also man nice shit

hit me up ya for 3-way collabo.

most kids quit school, to rap n be cool
eventually become fools, to drugs dey aint true
most rappers r trapped , in a cell, dwell in the darkness
in hell they swell, to the point they blow up n sell their selves
my heart races, so fast a pace maker would blow up
i stand still wit a BPM of a 100 n throw up

Way to start Building your verse .. Thought you coulda gone in a Lil different scheme wise,


so wat? my stress
takes control of me, leavin pains in my chest
ive yet to let anyone get a hold of me, i go to sleep while stayin awake
wen i wake up my body aches

Weak point ..

my palms sweat more than a runner on the last mile of a marathon
no beat all the snares r gone, my feet bare n the stairs r long

Liked this


their deep in where the scare is strong
i keep sinnin till my hair is long
like jesus ima bare a cross

Nah ..


The cameras on? I shine, the new paragon, even in prime time, I'm very calm
prepare a bomb, declare Islam like Farrakhan


Lmfao Way 2 Go in . Embarras Mom ?...

makes you want to set a bomb at a step of mall

^ Wasn't Feeling that piece of the line..



, or on a desk in a lobby
I can't do this professionally, maybe it can be left as a hobby
this weapon is probably going to get me arrested, I suggest you assault me
I'm infected like zombies, bring a wave of death, I have more success than tsunamis

This shit was hot.. you Snapped i feel like ya verse had a influenced style..

excellent, tshong = ekoms, he was the one who inspired this newly released song
evil geniuses know how to put the heat on, throw viral in the mix, we are three strong
we created the blueprint, time for it to be redrawn,

Weak point..


it won't take a whole song to murder you, if I drop 16 bars, respond with 32
or find the biggest monster to challenge me, I have a suicidal bombers mentality

Lmfao Slick Shit .


Overall This was a Pretty Solid Collab...
Have seen better from both, But i Did like a Bunch of Lines brought To the piece.

Plex only Thing was i Felt like u were goin Back n forth with your Writing levels.

Good shit though Keep droppin..

Thanks for the feedback.

I'll concede every point but the embarrass mom line, which I thought was decent as for being influenced, just by my old style really on that one.

i never wanted my name included.. i said i wanted to join in on a cypher (not a collab..not yet n e ways)

overall this was alright, obviously both freestyles, plex had the better results..it was decent none the less but could've been a lot more

Evolution wrote:i never wanted my name included.. i said i wanted to join in on a cypher (not a collab..not yet n e ways)

overall this was alright, obviously both freestyles, plex had the better results..it was decent none the less but could've been a lot more

I didn't say you wanted to be included, I was going for a freestyle, and you were messaging me.

Viral`s verse was decent for a freestyle. Plex outshined him but from what i gather it was a set up lol

Plex`s whole verse wad dope as fuck. i dont see anyone on here that can do those type of verses on a regular basis