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mayne this was nice the punches the multies all laced together well lol i started getting paranoid that it was about me lol but ya knwo i move on nice piece here pretty good hook you shud audio it

Thanks Mutual ..
LOL it ain't bout u...
two verses, two people.

"Niggaz iz wack i Won't Collab With the Game i aint Keshia Cole" --haha nice

2nd verse was ok...

Riggz

I really liked both the opening and the closer:

My Voice Spits The Sound Of Faith In a Town Of Hate
Lyrics Enter My Body Like Movin a Paragraph Down a Space
.....Counter Bar a Vet i've conquered The illest Spartaz Next
i'm By Far a Threat You Dreamed Of The House, I'm The Architect

the first verse and the chorus are dope, but the second verse kinda fell off to me.

apologies if the feed is a mess lol. ive tried to fix it but think i made it worse. my feed should be in red haha

$.@MB!T!0N.$ wrote:

These Dry Dudes Fronting Thinking They Fly Thru Stunting
Wanna Get At Hazard ..Did I Do Something??
i'll Fry You Younginz Your Diguised Crew's Nothin
Wanna Get at Hazard .. Did I Do Something??[/center]
nice little hook thing going on

My Voice Spits The Sound Of Faith In a Town Of Hate
Lyrics Enter My Body Like Movin a Paragraph Down a Space
Do i Have a Crown To Chase? People's Banks The King
i'm Lookin like Lloyd Believe The Spanks'll Sting
the lloyd banks shit is cool

You Can't Get in The Ring ya Gem ain't Even Shaped
this was a dope line

Sure You've Spent Evenings Straight Writing pieces
Till they Seeming Great,strivin in a illest dreamin state
you Outta Steamin state, Mad gone out of Picture
How you Run the Scriptures, i'm a Snake on The piece of gold
Niggaz iz wack i Won't Collab With the Game i aint Keshia Cole

i was wonderin where this was going but you brought it back with the Keshia Cole line. overall an excellent first verse

Haz Showing young Stars That Step How To Sparr The Best, Bob
& Weave, Counter Bar a Vet i've conquered The illest Spartaz Next
i'm By Far a Threat You Dreamed Of The House, I'm The Architect

ive heard architect punchlines used a couple of times recently but you put your own spin it.


Mr Mr..Yeah you Know May,
i Put a Bit of Effort But still its OK!
My Punches Are Hitting?
Bitch No Way! your Juiced Up Pissin O-j
Fuck how ya Nights is Spent
Understand Homo i Like ta Vent
You don't Make Any Type of Sense,
i Contradict yet ur Name is Wut u Fight Against!
Don't Think i Don't catch Those Shots,
I'm Neo And You Not,I Free Throw While U Squat
How We in The Same Spot? Ya Game's Hot Na u Lame Twat
On a Stage Of Washd Up Next U Got Chu a Drain'd Mop
That Can't Do Even That! 2 Dry & Dirty No Strings Attachd
Ugly Fuck You'd Needa Visit a Pimp To Bring Him Back[/center]
[/b]

this whole 2nd verse is decent. it lacked the standout punches of the first verse but you were definitly going in on whoever it was. i`ll be honest i have no idea who the verses were directed at since i havent been keeping up on what been going on latley. anyways good shit

LOL word. Thanks for the feed, the Second verse was Written 2 Be more Laid back In a sense Of Punches.
i Appreciate The Feed

Like everyone else said man the first verse is dope, I caught the flow easy and I was feelin a few punches like the keisha cole line.

The hook was nice, I bet u already have the audio planned out..

The second verse is laid back, like u intended it to, the material and flow just didn't match the top verse, it could probably do well in a piece entirely on its own but yeah that might be why ur getting that type of feed on it. Idk who its directed to though lol its kinda like a riddle. Who is it on?

Either way the piece is dope, keep it up

$.@MB!T!0N.$:


These Dry Dudes Fronting Thinking They Fly Thru Stunting
Wanna Get At Hazard ..Did I Do Something??
i'll Fry You Younginz Your Diguised Crew's Nothin
Wanna Get at Hazard .. Did I Do Something??
Catchy Hook..Good



My Voice Spits The Sound Of Faith In a Town Of Hate
Lyrics Enter My Body Like Movin a Paragraph Down a Space
Do i Have a Crown To Chase? People's Banks The King
i'm Lookin like Lloyd Believe The Spanks'll Sting ..
You Can't Get in The Ring ya Gem ain't Even Shaped
Sure You've Spent Evenings Straight Writing pieces
Till they Seeming Great,strivin in a illest dreamin state
you Outta Steamin state, Mad gone out of Picture, Bicka
How you Run the Scriptures, i'm a Snake on The piece of gold
Niggaz iz wack i Won't Collab With the Game i aint Keshia Cole
Haz Showing young Stars That Step How To Sparr The Best, Bob
& Weave, Counter Bar a Vet i've conquered The illest Spartaz Next
i'm By Far a Threat You Dreamed Of The House, I'm The Architect
Good Shit..Nice Wordplay, Feelin the whole piece



These Dry Dudes Fronting Thinking They Fly Thru Stunting
Wanna Get At Hazard ..Did I Do Something??
i'll Fry You Younginz Your Diguised Crew's Nothin
Wanna Get at Hazard .. Did I Do Something??
Still Good Hook


Mr Mr..Yeah you Know May,
i Put a Bit of Effort But still its OK!
My Punches Are Hitting?
Bitch No Way! your Juiced Up Pissin O-j
Fuck how ya Nights is Spent
Understand Homo i Like ta Vent
You don't Make Any Type of Sense,
i Contradict yet ur Name is Wut u Fight Against!
Nice Shit..Flow is Great
Don't Think i Don't catch Those Shots,
I'm Neo And You Not,I Free Throw While U Squat
How We in The Same Spot? Ya Game's Hot Na u Lame Twat
On a Stage Of Washd Up Next U Got Chu a Drain'd Mop
Good
That Can't Do Even That! 2 Dry & Dirty No Strings Attachd
Ugly Fuck You'd Needa Visit a Pimp To Bring Him Back
Decent Closer





Overall this was a ill drop i was feelin ya wordplay and your flow was on point here and of course there was some direct punches..Good Shit











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