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Im in red
Mah homegirls in blue

Speak into mah eyes cause mah heart can't see
Answer the questions of mah mind so that mah soul won't bleed
Clarify exactly what it is you think you want from me
Tell me where it all went wrong, not that "it isn't you...its me"


That doesn't really help, the questions weren't answered
And its killing me now as if ur false perceptions were a cancer
U need to recheck ur part, like a pencil, u lead me on n left a mark
It was a theft at heart, we had a light but u kept it dark


Let's take a minute to be real cause mah mind is in a whirlwind
Words are comin out but im writin with a blind pen
The only thing I needed was a moment of ya time
For you to tell the truth about this bond in this present place in time
Your emotion was mah fuel..mah passion was your flame


...it kept you goin but for what? your actions weren't sayin..

For love's cost i compensated...My own thoughts, I contemplated..
But you hesitated on the truth, n i still lost when I caught you fakin..
Blame yourself its obvious you had the problem to begin with,
You blocked me off so that you can leave the conflict in an instant


A convenience nonetheless is what chu wanna check me
Then I Fill with reckless desire to remain listlessly unseen
Obscene..with a vision of catastrophic thinking
Drop your guard when you can’t be..raise your arms when you around me


How cud u lose respect proudly? mah heart, u destroyed into fractions
U toyed with my passion.. n now ur solution is Avoidance reaction?!
How cud you light a flame and then blow it? ur lame and u know it
Ur true frame? I exposed it cuz you were too ashamed to show it!


as a man you claimed to be what chu couldn't handle
oh no wait cause a man doesn't need to establish his own label
take apart your facade and you're left without a thing
stripped down to the bare minimum of a supposed human being
quit the acting...take control...make it like it never was
skip the lines...take the time...the air is full of my disgust
a has been will almost never be..the future won't stay the same
this time im givin up..and you're the one to blame


I'm tired of the mind games, reverse the psych, ur the perfect type
To think ur word is nice but to be honest u aint even worth the fight!
Yeah u heard me right, and for your own good please go maturate
Cuz u wont graduate if u pass as fake, ur own damn path will break!
What i have is great but even if u hoped for more i closed the door,
Imma find someone better cuz for u my heart will never open for..
I let it out tho, no more hard feelins.. I got better things to deal with,
And you're plastic, cuz similar to Pinocchio u wishin u were "real" kid!!

lol i diggs!!

Haha yup

Shit was cool. I dug your stuff more, obviously, since you had more depth and the multies made things much more fluid and smooth. Pretty dope idea though. Homegirl came through on this one. Definitely a nice read.

This shit was cool and quite original Arv. Impressive.
Arv - "That doesn't really help, the questions weren't answered
And its killing me now as if ur false perceptions were a cancer"

Marrisha - "Drop your guard when you can’t be..raise your arms when you around me"

While you used a lot of surface metaphores and word play, she used deep metaphores and simplicity... nice combo. I liked this Arv.. I really did.

I don't know why cats is sayin' "ehh, shit was cool"
I hate downplayed feed, this shit was on point in every
aspect in terms of your verses, your homegirl could
use some coaching, woulda made the joint a lil more
evened out and consistent if she had some multies poppin.
but other than that, this shit was dope.

lol yo arv i need coachin...so i guess we betta start trainin eh?? ha ha

lol not really, you have ur own style, this site mostly lives by the style of multis, ur poetry is still top notch to me.

but we will be making more pieces together =)

Word lol..I thought maybe I was jus trippin..big ups to yall for the love though

=] No doubt lookin' forward to it

Nah, don't get it twisted, the shit was nice. The contrast between the two styles is what really makes this enjoyable. Jumping from poetic to lyrical and back is a fresh change, something a lot of us aren't accustomed to, myself included. But for real, if you can throw a few multies in but maintain your level of metaphors, you'd be one deep lyricist. It took me a couple reads to really appreciate the message here. Not saying it was hard to catch, I just think I may have missed it because I was thrown off guard by the different style. Still a dope collab nonetheless. Plus it's always good to see Arv comin from the heart and not the fist.

No doubt i can respect that..and i think that's wat made it work cause we most definitely have two different styles..much appreciated..and yeah he got a soft side somewhere under all that dopeness ha ha

Phasewon wrote:I don't know why cats is sayin' "ehh, shit was cool"
I hate downplayed feed.

Let's take a minute to be real cause mah mind is in a whirlwind
Words are comin out but im writin with a blind pen
The only thing I needed was a moment of ya time
For you to tell the truth about this bond in this present place in time
Your emotion was mah fuel..mah passion was your flame

^^^^Whoa...LoL! I liked that your girl did her thing on that part

as far as Arv goes he defintly brought some finesse
I was feeling this piece tho' it was different n nice to vibe too
keep doin' you! and keep writing!

this was decent. im not a huge fan of these kinda drops so i wasnt feelin it that much but thats just me. but it was well put together, it read smoothly and there was plenty of emotion. obviously your bits were more advanced from the "everything gotta have multis" perspective but the girls shit was cool too. the two of you went together well. it was very smooth and i wouldnt be surprised if you actually wrote the whole thing haha

Thanks for the feed guy much appreciated