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Disstape Heaven^^ ..

Posted: Mon Dec 07, 2009 6:48 pm
by Haz
Quix Quick To Play With Me,Desperate Fa Collabs tryna Lay With Me
Reckless Lil Fag To Gay Ta B,Straight I Turn ta Em n Slay The C
How You Run The D When u have a hard time gettin from A TA B ???
Your Probably A Geek With a T.v. On Mr. Miagi Repeat
i'll John Gotti a Speech Followed With Bodyin Beef
Got Ya Face In The Ground Like Butchas Hidin bodys in Meat
Word Is You The Local Snitch Round,You Wn't Stand Up In Time
No Enlisted Hoe i Don't Bitch down,i ain't Arv i Man up 2 Mine
I Ain't About To Care For Dudes Who Amount To Mere
Niggahz Get Ripped Bounce N Chair Like A Statue & Fountains There
I'm Grillin ya Quix..Doubting Stares? i Don't call u Extraweight
More Meal On Me get the House Prepared!
Quix Said I Never Get Out of Here,
If He wasn't So Pinn'd to My nuts i could get Out This Chair..
I Should Puff On This Fool's Dust! He Was Rench Raped The Tools Fuck'd..
Making a Bandana Out Of Meul Nuts,
Your a Gangsta? Did U Pick That Ignorance Up On a School Bus??
I Mean it's Pretty Kidish,you Be on some Kiddy Kid Ish,
Probably Crackin like running Over Fifty Six Rib's,
You'll Sober Later Bastard Probably On Method
Like Askin Flex the Most Overrated Rapper..
Probably Loco For Coco Shanelle,
You'll get Pumped over White like 'Sa-No-Co ta Shell..
This Clown Is Bummy Dirt not From The Underground But Scummy,
The Only Waterboy Around The Honey's His Game Sounds Like Gumbys
i Found Um Funny a 'Waste of Time' Like Bomb Around The Tummy!

Re: Disstape Heaven^^ ..

Posted: Tue Dec 08, 2009 7:45 am
by QwarterZ
This was nice I was feeling the punches in this
purdy dope lacing em one after the other...
very nice transitions!

Probably Loco For Coco Shanelle,
You'll get Pumped over White like 'Sa-No-Co ta Shell..
^^^I liked how that was set up
nice write tho' keep doin' you!

Re: Disstape Heaven^^ ..

Posted: Thu Dec 10, 2009 7:44 am
by Quix
lol...funny, you havn't accepted my battle call but your dissing me!! That must mean your Scared of me!! ahh don't worry kid your not the only one!!

I would eat that as an apetizer kid!! lol

Re: Disstape Heaven^^ ..

Posted: Thu Dec 10, 2009 8:01 am
by Riggz
hmmm thinking of constructive critisism...
I liked a few of your jabs, some hit, some were way left field with no chance of returning...
ie; "I Mean it's Pretty Kidish,you Be on some Kiddy Kid Ish,
Probably Crackin like running Over Fifty Six Rib's" -- I didn't really get the meaning of this bar at all. kiddy kid ish...sounded pretty kiddish... if you know what I mean.

Choppy flow here in there but to be expected on a diss-rhyme.

Re: Disstape Heaven^^ ..

Posted: Fri Dec 11, 2009 3:26 pm
by complexity
Riggz wrote:hmmm thinking of constructive critisism...
I liked a few of your jabs, some hit, some were way left field with no chance of returning...
ie; "I Mean it's Pretty Kidish,you Be on some Kiddy Kid Ish,
Probably Crackin like running Over Fifty Six Rib's" -- I didn't really get the meaning of this bar at all. kiddy kid ish...sounded pretty kiddish... if you know what I mean.

Choppy flow here in there but to be expected on a diss-rhyme.
I hate to say it because I'd love to see Ambition absolutely destroyed Quix. This diss didn't do it for me, the structure was good, the rhymes were decent.

The problem is the disses were weak. The wordplay was basic or subtle at best.

You seemed to get a bit too complicated without the harder punches that you demonstrated in previous battles.

I mean, this wasn't a waste, I still would have dropped it, only as a warm up though.

Even the clever wordplay waste/waist of the last bar seemed more like mocking Quix's style than actually dissing him.

8.0/10

Re: Disstape Heaven^^ ..

Posted: Fri Dec 11, 2009 3:37 pm
by Haz
lol Thanks For The Feed.

Yeah This Is a Warm Up

these are all series, i'm dissing a Few people Back & Forth.

You Think this piece was weak Punch Wise?

Re: Disstape Heaven^^ ..

Posted: Fri Dec 11, 2009 3:50 pm
by complexity
$.@MB!T!0N.$ wrote:lol Thanks For The Feed.

Yeah This Is a Warm Up

these are all series, i'm dissing a Few people Back & Forth.

You Think this piece was weak Punch Wise?
Depends what you rate the punches on. I think that if I was spitting this against someone to their face, they'd look at me like, ok, what else.