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All I do is wait n ponder, try to escape my problems
touch on nothin', hate n prosper, as my days'll faulter
I am starting to chase a alter, like dating Karma
but she don't love me so my own acclaim is mortality
dating god's within the core family
some say it's incest I debate on it but don't ingest
taste but in quest, I follow all I can finesse
create a alternate...universe
usin' verse as a bridge to the heavens
hopin' in night's moonlight she'd pay attention
what come's about is a lil' less then lesson
so I spiral into a lessen'd depression
sunk lower, feelin' innane, drunk, sober
twirling in a abyss while I duck the nova's
rebirth lives without deceit leavin' me fuck'd over
plus the boulders get moved by the Titan
reciting life n death in the same writing
love is life but death in the same incited
insight is....harder when you don't know what it is
but she can taste blood like a busted lip
before I'd wait just to get the bust unclip'd
like a coupon...literally I let loose on...
till I fold her legs up....a futon...
as I cruise on my world becomes dispersed with friendship
haters in the circle, squared out and indented
the pushin' me into a corner empty, shitlike, septic
hit like threats when your first child goes missin'
I don't know whether to go with it, or weave out those split ends?
I feel stupid tho' cuz sometimes I really don't get it?
how you a friend but have the audacity to bring me down?
fluck it I'm thru and I ain't even goin' to stick with these clowns....

sometimes I think the world against me but that's just my ego....
separted from soul, but set on the same pedestal, so equal....

mayne couldnt get the flow on this but it was aiight got better towards the end at the beggining this seemed more of a poem read rap than spittin but it was still nice hope you return the feed Joey Piff & Mutual

This was decent. Not the best I've seen from you, but different lol. The flow was a little choppy in places and some of the rhymes were off just a touch, but I could still go through it. The topics were fairly random, you seemed to touch on a few different ideas. Could still use some work, but I'm not gonna go into too much detail since I know you can do better. Keep droppin em, playa.