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This is a piece i made off the top of my head..just zoned in and went to work with it, i hope u enjoy.



It even hurts to confess it, ur lack of perspective halts further progression
when u turn ur words into weapons.. u dissect my mind to disturb n oppress it
its mental murderous aggression, verbal injections into my nerves n intestines
you're superb at infestin, my well being that i wish to purge my ingestions,
my cries for ur love just converted to questions; still whats worst is its left in-
-side my brain to resonate n crumble me to debris, shovin me to mah knees
it feels like im under rock n rubble all beneath the troubles u leave with me
I try so hard to make it right see, yet u take it lightly, i see the lack of passion
my words are backed by actions but ull live ur life never to be in satisfaction,
but Im still there.. As much as I hate what I'm feelin when ur making it known
about how being with me isnt perfect, u grab me when u take what you own..
I was real..am real, here for u now, please dont defend whats false..
Its distasteful, that insecurity and paranoia is the unintentional end results
ur failure to comprehend insults yet in return I always have to surrender faults?
Never this much had i wanted to end my pulse just so maybe it'll help u notice
how much im chokin by my own attempts to make myself less hopeless.
just focus...please i want u to let go of the past so we can have whats new,
yeah i wish that i had everything too, but I thought i still could when what i have is you..

This was nice as hell. Great imagery and emotion, the multies were nice, flow could be a tad stretched depending on the beat, but I had no issues making it work. This was really good, nice to see you exploring a more poetic side.

hmm, Good piece here

It even hurts to confess it, ur lack of perspective halts further progression
when u turn ur words into weapons.. u dissect my mind to disturb n oppress it

ILLL ^


its mental murderous aggression, verbal injections into my nerves n intestines
you're superb at infestin, my well being that i wish to purge my ingestions,

that seemed a Bit forced tho ^^

can you explain what Purgin your Ingestions means and how it applys to the BAr???


meh, seems you tryed to hard on your multies...Didn't really tie everything in together!!

Nice lil key tho!

Arv- you're improving it seems with every post. Nice multies; however I thought the lines were a bit long.. but, if you spit like Twista...shouldn't be a problem LOL
Fav Line: was your opener "It even hurts to confess it, ur lack of perspective halts further progression
when u turn ur words into weapons.. u dissect my mind to disturb n oppress it"

thanks your niggers uppin