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no flipping, biting, DR, hate votes please

thanks

due 72 hours after both check in

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this gon be a Hot battle, G'luck Arv!


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aigh, G'luck Arv




look,

I speak artillary cuz i love blast-ing dah Gun; n believe me, I've been Fasting for Months
so now i'm attacking this punk! cuz dah 'Only Titan named Vince' has a Last name of Young (Vince Young - Tennesse Titans)
look Vince, be Discrete and Tentivie! your obsolete, irrelavent so just Read dah Evidence!
we don't Beleieve your Sentences, Cuz the only ones 'Choked up over AR' are Retarded Kids wid Speech impediments
Vince ain't fire shit, your 'Missing the lead' so this shits a 'Wrap' like a Subtle-Turbin!
you'll soon Retire Kid; after i 'piss on yah head' and really show you the Trouble-Urine
so Just Go back tah School Dog,
Better yet Dog School cuz yah rhymes Lack Obedience; sit back, and Start Deleating-em!
cuz Readin them is hilarious, so watch me 'Kill this Joke' like a Bad Comedian
after this, he'll have no choice but to Confess-He's Lame! Chris Angel the way he Ingests-these Flames!
we don't Respect-his Game; So Just Fuckin 'Hit the Road Dog' like Jesse James!

Punches-Arv
Personals-Tie
Flow-Arv
Wordplay-Quix
Entertainment-Arv

Vote-Arv

Punches:arv
Personals:arv
Flow:arv
Wordplay:quix
Entertainment:arv

Vote:arv

not the usual from quix..arv had a smoother structure...both had a bunch of fillers..arv overall connected better though


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-Quix-

I speak artillary cuz i love blast-ing dah Gun; n believe me, I've been Fasting for Months
so now i'm attacking this punk! cuz dah 'Only Titan named Vince' has a Last name of Young (Vince Young - Tennesse Titans)

7.5 nice name reference and rhymescheme, punch wasn't the greatest

look Vince, be Discrete and Tentivie! your obsolete, irrelavent so just Read dah Evidence!
we don't Beleieve your Sentences, Cuz the only ones 'Choked up over AR' are Retarded Kids wid Speech impediments

8.0 punch was pretty funny, and the nameplay was nice

Vince ain't fire shit, your 'Missing the lead' so this shits a 'Wrap' like a Subtle-Turbin!
you'll soon Retire Kid; after i 'piss on yah head' and really show you the Trouble-Urine

5.0 first line was decent, second one was weak, none the less a decent rhymescheme

so Just Go back tah School Dog,
Better yet Dog School cuz yah rhymes Lack Obedience; sit back, and Start Deleating-em!
cuz Readin them is hilarious, so watch me 'Kill this Joke' like a Bad Comedian

5.0 another decent bar, nothin special, pun was weak

after this, he'll have no choice but to Confess-He's Lame! Chris Angel the way he Ingests-these Flames!
we don't Respect-his Game; So Just Fuckin 'Hit the Road Dog' like Jesse James!

8.0 i like that last pun with jesse james, rhymescheme was nice too

33.5/50



-Arvincible-

with them lies about the fo' fives n the glocks and them hos climbin ya cock
See the closest thing u'll get to "rape" is forcin rhymes in ur drops !!

5.0 pretty weak opener, rhymescheme was decent

this dude has no personals, and he cant spit it right if his flow doesn't function
His meaning of "workin niggas out" is stretchin his bars like yoga instructions!

9.0 that punch was pretty nice, played but nice none the less, rhymescheme was decent

Lemme unload the destruction, Quix is all jibberish, blah-blahs-and-babbles
nigga ur wack at this, nobody really thinks ur hot so just hop-off-the-battles!

4.0 useless..rhymescheme continued n it was so-so

too much exclamation marks!!!!! the lack of delivery means ya verse aint winnin!!
like bad sex, dude's first to finish and ur a failure to produce like infertile women!!

7.5 decent overall, pun was koo and it had a personal

its just gun talk that's jammed in his verse mayne he should've ran in the first place
Check it..get dissected!! His shit consists of coerced lies, and just crammin-of-wordplays !!


8.5 nice closer, semi-personal cuz it could almost be universal..but in this case i understand the pun, rhymescheme was decent

34/50



Quix: 33.5/50
Arvincible: 34/50

barely inched it... i was actually surprised when i totaled it up lol, either way it was a decent battle and very close

weird, i actually tried to avoid fillers in this battle

well the set ups to some of ur punches were fillers, in a sense almost everyone uses them though...nothin to stress over

Punches-Quix
Personals-Tie
Flow-Arv
Wordplay-Quix
Entertainment-Quix

Honestly. I thought Arv's verse in his previous battle was much stronger. Quix killed him with the 4 bars or so. I thought both had a lot of filler like the urine line.

The main reason that I'm going to give my vote to Quix is because I thought that Arv wrote bars that were more unoriginal than Quix's, who had a kill this joke line.

I guess, that battle didn't live up to the hype that it should have. I thought I'd give a vote, to open this battle up and get more votes for this battle.

It was close.

Overall: Quix

thanks to those who voted!!

can we get some more "Explained" votes thanks!

Well I read both of the three times just to make sure.
Quix, basically I couldn't flow to yours.. not saying that you can't flow to your own verse, but I'm very partial to writtens that I don't have to struggle to find a flow with. 2nd as original as your punches were they seemed kind of forced to me ie; "you'll soon Retire Kid; after i 'piss on yah head' and really show you the Trouble-Urine" (maybe reworded better i would've had more umph to it). Not to mention the "You'll soon retire kid" part appears to be a filler which in turn would have shortened your lines and not seem so much like stretched bars.

Arv, appears to have been working on his flow.. and it read very well. His punches hit the mark after his set up... like about how Quix talks about guns and bitches.. and then hits'em with the rape/forced line.. nice set up and delivery within the realms of the flow. Arv had some nice punches too "this dude has no personals, and he cant spit it right if his flow doesn't function
His meaning of "workin niggas out" is stretchin his bars like yoga instructions!" - haha it's funnier when it's true.

I really thought that Quix would take this in a land-slide.. but I was slightly dissappointed in his verse.

Vote = Arv

yeah explained votes are better lol

3-1 me

uppin for votes


good battle quix

i'll go back and break it down bar for bar later today or somethin..uppin for more votes in this battle

4-1 tko

good battle quix

someone close and update this

-closed and updated-

(this can be re-evaluated if u find it necessary quix)