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Nothing serious but it's better than nothing. Just an introduction really.

Make no mistake, I got what it takes to make a queen
Quickly slip in the back door and swiftly make a scene
Stacking tallies with my chalk drawn, leave the crocks gone
I ain't Tony Hawk but on boards I got my air walk on
Tightly gripping this shit with an iron fist to clip fucks
This bitch is smoother than black ice, try not to slip up
I ain't quiet, wanna battle? Try it, I'm the riot
Eating up your soft bars, a non-solid food diet
So, better stock up on the locks and chains
I'll perform a Houdini routine, with not one strain
I got no problem with populating the walk of shame
You talk good game, but you lames'll never stop this dame

Make no mistake, I got what it takes to make a queen
Quickly slip in the back door and swiftly make a scene

Nice opener.

Stacking tallies with my chalk drawn, leave the crocks gone
I ain't Tony Hawk but on boards I got my air walk on

Played

Tightly gripping this shit with an iron fist to clip fucks
This bitch is smoother than black ice, try not to slip up

Try rewording

I ain't quiet, wanna battle? Try it, I'm the riot
Eating up your soft bars, a non-solid food diet

^^ Fire.

So, better stock up on the locks and chains
I'll perform a Houdini routine, with not one strain

Not bad. am feeling it.

I got no problem with populating the walk of shame
You talk good game, but you lames'll never stop this dame

You started better then you finsihed.
Keep ya head up and keep droppin. you will get it.

Not my best work but your feedback is appreciated guys.

Riot quit sleepin on em girl haha but this was dope for ya intro
not gonna lie the flow fell off a bit at the end or maybe it was just the way i read it but nice to see ur racin ahead of me already droppin shit lmao

This was purdy cool, can't wait to see some more work from you
otherwise keep writing!

feeling that soft bar line tho'!

Make no mistake, I got what it takes to make a queen
Quickly slip in the back door and swiftly make a scene

aiight ..


Stacking tallies with my chalk drawn, leave the crocks gone
I ain't Tony Hawk but on boards I got my air walk on

Lol This goes Hard ..

Tightly gripping this shit with an iron fist to clip fucks
This bitch is smoother than black ice, try not to slip up

Second Line is Simple .. First Line Is cool, liking words str8


I ain't quiet, wanna battle? Try it, I'm the riot
Eating up your soft bars, a non-solid food diet

Lol.. Sorta Funny, flow on Point

So, better stock up on the locks and chains
I'll perform a Houdini routine, with not one strain

Lmao this Was Cool

I got no problem with populating the walk of shame
You talk good game, but you lames'll never stop this dame

Nah .. Not a good Way To Bounce..


Anyways This Was a Introduction Decent Shit.

Stay up n Keep Dropping.

Thanks guys.

I peeped you Shorty.. loved the Tony Hawk line... let's see what else you got.

this was a nice drop, my favorite line was

I ain't quiet, wanna battle? Try it, I'm the riot
Eating up your soft bars, a non-solid food diet

^^^
that was dope, keep writing and stay active

I really liked your flow and wordplay. Those are definitely your strongest suits. I think it kinda fell off at the end, didnt really bring the bang on that last bar, but over-all this is dope and shows you have alot of potential. Nice drop, and looking forward to seeing more from you.

Shit I remember reading this way back. Ain't no point in tellin ya what I thought gurl you already know, but drop some new material cuz I know you upped ya game.

Thanks again fellas.

I ain't Tony Hawk but on boards I got my air walk on

Hah

This bitch is smoother than black ice, try not to slip up

So, better stock up on the locks and chains
I'll perform a Houdini routine, with not one strain

This Was an aiight drop, nothing really impressive. Had some nice witty lines and a couple descent bars.. seems like a quick key though...