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When you stay blazin trees you just dont see the speed
that this life progress, ... ya lifes a mess
so you stay feelin pain yet you fight the stress
i use a pen and pad when i light my sess
so i dont write right like writin right to left
aint nothin left to right except insight and depth
so when i kill a track its like rightful death
i ressurrect every session like the mics possessed
the messiah with the flow, blown, higher then you know
got my pedal to the metal but im drivin in the snow
the tire tred is low so i slide with every turn
but i aint slowin down you know i will never learn
i been proven innocent the trial is adjurned
so you could talk shit and get a smile in return
as far as style is concerned nobodys in comparison
im arrogant but fuck it aint nobody even hearin it
they dazed, its like they all sittin wit a slump
so my bars over ya head like ya fist when you pump
i gotta make the leap but its a distance to jump
i mean makein' real shit that still hits in ya trunk
plus most listen to junk, or so its what it seems
underground, mainstream is there noone in between?
until yall really listen i aint closer to my dreams
just another mother fucker an ocean in the stream
what i mean? there aint enough room in the lime light
everyones a star but only some shine bright....

FINALLY DAAMN.
I been waitin on a drop from you for a while now

anyways I think it flows very well, But I don't understand the message behind it (if their is one.)

you can do aloot better!
NOW FLOOD THE SCRIPTS WITH YOUR SHIT HOMIE.

lmao you know your my favorite poster on here right bro? you know what ill go drop somethin else just for you big homie haha

Ahaha ight man imma be waitin for it!

Cool man, ya 1st and last bars were strong and real. Every rhymescheme in the drop was used effectively, I thought you were gonna carry on the 'life's a mess' multi too long and just milk it and force shit, but you cut it off before that, so good awareness. I was feelin a lot of the views shared, noticed some filler but you made it interesting filler and didn't go off on a tangent about any one thing. Overall it's a solid verse and I think ya got your point across, props.

This was decent. It flowed and connected well. Looking forward to seeing more of your shit.

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