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i've got a mental disease a lack of simple symphathy
trapt in a bad situation like the frontline infantries
weed helps me instantly but leaves my mind-drained
grew up in a broken family and watched the times-change
bitches play their mind-games but i get deeper-than-that
been dwellin on the death of music an the reaper-is-back
try an be a speaker-of-facts but the lies eat-at-my-soul
feelin down and findin out its hard to keep-at-my-goals
feelings deep-an-not-whole like i lost half-of-my-heart
cant find my emotions like they were stashed-in-the-dark
first to come an last-to-depart like alcoholics-in-bars
can't speak my mind out right so i put knoweledge-in-barres
in solice-i-starve a cliche' artist but so-different
i throw words like track shot puts but at a pro's-distance
in a flowed-sentence i release all of my inner-demons
they say a criminal is crooked well this sinners-leanin
in a dimmer-evenin a winnin-heathen rises-from-the-dust
had an dark epiphany one day and relized-that-im-corrupt
i'm sizing-to-erupt had enough of this mental-stress
tired of havin remorse and always smellin the scent-of-death
is there any temples-left cause i'm praying-for-change
don't know how to feel it myself so i'm relaying-my-pain
but i'm stayin-insane trying to figure out this-struggle
trying to build my self up but in an instance shit-crumbles
and amoungst the mixed-rubble i find my self stuck fucked
and much less-humble

Wow. Our styles can be extremely similar.

Real solid.

I mean, I'm feeling this drop as a whole. The metaphors are what really stood out: the frontline, the reaper, the leaning line.

Some of them could have been executed better. Sometimes the rhyme schemes fell off; for the most part you were consistent.

first to come an last-to-depart like alcoholics-in-bars
can't speak my mind out right so i put knoweledge-in-barres
in solice-i-starve a cliche' artist but so-different
i throw words like track shot puts but at a pro's-distance

I was feeling that....I think your skills keep elevating more n more with each drop

like your thought process becomes tighter line for line
if only my work came out that way....nonetheless a dope piece!

thanks... still ^^^^ing

i've got a mental disease a lack of simple symphathy
trapt in a bad situation like the frontline infantries
weed helps me instantly but leaves my mind-drained
grew up in a broken family and watched the times-change
bitches play their mind-games but i get deeper-than-that
been dwellin on the death of music an the reaper-is-back
try an be a speaker-of-facts but the lies eat-at-my-soul
feelin down and findin out its hard to keep-at-my-goals


whoa, i really felt that shit mah dude ... nice as allways!!

I'm diggin' it.
"in a dimmer-evenin a winnin-heathen rises-from-the-dust
had an dark epiphany one day and relized-that-im-corrupt " I like the word epiphany

uppin