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The Weird And Wonderfull.

Posted: Thu Jan 28, 2010 10:48 pm
by MesaR
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/hellb ... 15509.html


The weird guy spit's a flow-rhyme-and-heat, kill's in a heart-beat,
dont start-beef, he's up all night dwelling, no-time-to-sleep,
He's up all day, praying-on-the-weak, slaying-on-the-street,
dont know what he's saying-it-dont-speak, his apperance is displaying-a-freak,
His real name is black-listed, His hands are flat- fisted,
finger's are fat-blistered, head spinning, and back- twisted,
he's got book's-on-annasetic, gets treated worse then crooks's-with-paramedic's
hunched over, rib cage showing off, he almost look's-kinda-annorexic,
he's used to having a runny-nose, funny-toes, and bummy-clothes,
who is this man, nobody-know's, i'll tell you one thing being a junkie-blows,

Re: The Weird And Wonderfull.

Posted: Fri Jan 29, 2010 7:46 am
by eMCee Havic
this wasnt bad, good multis..mostly... stayed on subject overall an allright read keep um coming

Re: The Weird And Wonderfull.

Posted: Fri Jan 29, 2010 7:48 am
by QwarterZ
Your style reminds me of MF Doom on certain points
then again you do seem kinda wild....I can't hate tho'
keep writing!

Re: The Weird And Wonderfull.

Posted: Sat Jan 30, 2010 12:06 pm
by MesaR
who is mf doom ?, thank's for the feedback

Re: The Weird And Wonderfull.

Posted: Wed Feb 03, 2010 9:10 am
by Weird Sense
It was an alright quick read. Rhyme style was a little simplistic but on par with subject matter throughout. It read a little like "Poet" from the tv show OZ. Keep on writing.