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Xtaci wrote:"I'm in a wonderful position: I'm unknown, I'm underrated, and there's nowhere to go but up."-Pierre S. Dupont IV

Qwarterzone

A genetic beyond the very synthetic
apathetic but way beyond pathetic
photogenic, generic, but feenin' acceptance
hardwork hesitated my own statments
catchin' flack stuck in the thick mud
figured I was the ruler that Rick was
Rick is, the risk is the very contracept
concept on the deck watch the Inspector
soul connecter ink and pad, chest protector

[Woah. I had a feeling you were going to say rick was, rick is...That was sick. Good bars.]

the director, injector of the venom and serum
wear the denim and tear em' in my error
witnessin' terror beyond my windows terrace
not lucid, unless I felt a need to be looped in
couped in the useless views of who is?
pursuers of the same goal different affect
dialect is somewhat awkward indiff-a-rent
intelligence battles the shell I'm buried in
varyin' from wise mind to others blind eyes
either I tried or I gave up a life twice live
so underrated I don't even have limits to my rhymes

[Pretty good. Not at the slightly higher level that you have set for yourself. I thought that you painted a clear enough image with your words. Let's move on.]

modern Defiance

Underrated shits I was artificially inseminated with greatness
But haters hated how my created works are common placement
I’m in the basement pumping out more rhymes for no reason
these heathens seize um and tell me my words are out of season
written grievance cause I’m the best yet to ever pick the pen
I get sick of them but my sick intents will always fuckin finish them

[I especially liked the end.]

Diminish them the resurrection of the Defiance against the main stream
The games king here to maim these rappers who paved the main street
You take me serious cause if you don’t I’ll snatch your grounds
Match my sound? Its impossible facts are found the macks in towns
Pass around the M. D HA! Your judgments are wack an unreal
Some feel the need to do dumb deals but Defiance is the real deal
I peal seals that as white rapper I’ll never be better than Marshall
That my parcels are partial and my arsenal is dead as marky marks flows
Still I start flows with the intent to prove um wrong with every rhyme
Your petty lines against me keep me on my toes wit a ready mind
I steady climb underrated but my rating doesn’t really mean shit
Haters lick the penis my rhymes the meanest take your garbage to the cleanas
Cause modern defiance redeems his name underrated fuck the fame
You’ll be struck wit shame when Modern climbs higher above your name …beotch

[Solid verse]



xtaci

This just a three man-defiance, gotta "qwarter" ta get "zoned" cuz da fans-still-byist...
cuz dey fans-of-violence, I mean we aint Drake or Wayne but yall can-still-buy-us//

[The first line was the best one]

No ones standin-by-us, just a damn-allaince, da media treats like a-out-cast...
but not a-outKast, just ta trash to bash and laught at and doubt-lasts//

but about-that, we stringin up together, and createn new-lines...
for da cruid-crime, when another famous bitch is wantin a few-rhymes//*

Its a new-time, when they keep making-doe, I mean its blowin-my-mind...
but if I ever heard my shit on da radio, id laugh knowin-its-mine//

[That's a stretch, but decent bar]

dey just curoted-rhymes, all it takes is a pencil-and-maker...
ya red rags lika minstril-ya-faker, and all dey believe in is a stencil-n-paper//**

and your fans still cater, even though they see all the greed-ya-got...
while we think-up-plots, for some way we can make some green-or-pot//

[No. Never ever, say something like that, because you can't make pot. Make sure your sentences make sense at face value]

da need-wont-stop, cuz we have to work so we be payen-da-bills...
while you rich lil fucks toast after makin-a-mil//

so im taken-a-pill, so i can slip my life away...
but id rather live my life dis way//

[Good bar]

maken very little pay, with no chance for success...
im never depressed, while my mind stays forever at rest//

id rather be underrated then known as the best, dat shits busted-i'll-prove...
cuz if i fail now my image has nothen-ta-lose//

[You remind me of myself when I started to use multis, though you have a slightly better grasp of rhyming, you will get there]

*T.I. is gettin sued for biting a beat and rhymes off of an underrated guy trying to spread his name out
**all these big rappers rep red rags like once like a minstril cycle and ppl like dr dre and fat joe have ghost writers.. and stencils are basically outlines of stuff you trace so you can make it ez get it...