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Re: Lunch Time Scribble.

Posted: Wed Mar 24, 2010 2:15 pm
by Haz
You aint a b boy, you a rap has been, doing that one two
I'm like leroy from the last dragon doing that kung fu

lol cool flow

I'll drive down the wrong side of the street with no lights on
I'll wear nothing but a trench coat and smoke meth out of a pipe bomb

liking this

Since when did confessional booths turn into glory holes
Since when did the FCC have the power to change how the stories told

Word

I'll forever remember all those who ignored me and never gave a crap
I'll work so hard at this all I can think of is "damn cory you better take a nap"

Take a nap Cory.

Keep it 110% n did anyone who ever "supported" me give me a thanks for that?
Nah, because everyone only wants to hear some corny bubble gum gangsta rap

Hot.

They don't wanna hear a creative cat lay a story on paper back
Critics won't even know what to say to that, they'll say it's boring n' there's no bank in that

This kids a beast

Watch me take this pen and aim it at the game from this flow that I made from scratch
I'll wave these rythmes in your face like a forensic detective waves at nats

Whoooooo Kid!!


I'm nocturnal, you can catch me chilling in the caves with bats
Biting at intruders, paparazzi running out looking they were just part of a snake attack

Lmfao. Tough

Most rappers put on make up, grab their dick, yank it back and tape it to their anus crack
I'm about my cheese, but bitch please... Police lay their traps, that's why I don't hang with rats...

Not Up to par with the rest.


GOOD SHIT..

Liked it

Stay Up N Keep d ropping

Re: Lunch Time Scribble.

Posted: Sun Mar 28, 2010 6:39 am
by Riggz
Rugged, don't take offense, but saying this outloud, I picture a tall lankey white boy who occassionally listens to ludacris and pearl jam, writing his own version of "hip-hop" to make light of his humdrum suburban life.
The verse it self is subtle with a sort of bland taste to it, however, it's so clear and captivating that it's hard not to read the entire piece all the way through to the ending just so you can see how it all turns out.

You're an interesting writer man, I know I can always click on your thread and at the very least it will be entertaining and different.
Reminds me of the early writings of this kid named Sethro back in the day...

keep elevating

Re: Lunch Time Scribble.

Posted: Sun Mar 28, 2010 9:09 am
by Riggz
"Hey PS, thanks though on the "make up your own style of hip hop", I know since you're most likely african american that was probably meant as a racist jab (and you'll misconstrue that into something negative) but that's what I do, I really try to have my own style." -- not at all Ruggz, i knew you were just being yourself and that's what I enjoy about your writings.

good shit man...

Re: Lunch Time Scribble.

Posted: Thu Apr 01, 2010 7:54 pm
by M-Vario
Riggz wrote:You're an interesting writer man, I know I can always click on your thread and at the very least it will be entertaining and different.
^^ i agree... i havent been disappointed on a single link yet.

Re: Lunch Time Scribble.

Posted: Thu Apr 01, 2010 10:33 pm
by NoVeL
1 Word 4 This Drop...RUGGED!!
Would Love 2 Hear More From You N Keep Elevating

Re: Lunch Time Scribble.

Posted: Mon Apr 04, 2011 3:35 am
by Shawnmd
nice scribble.