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I hit the sidelines, the walkway where the blind man dreams sight
see's life with feeling, and keeps strife where it leads light
I can't see like he might, embracing fate walkin' behold each line..........


I can sense ya presence before I met the essence
you regressed depression by the help you connected
from the background I felt like I should back out
I dropped, blacked out with fates arms in the wrap around
s'pose you were'nt here you'd probably see a hearse here
strong tears squirt here n not a voice is heard here
once waterworks clear then there'd be a verse here
I left at your third year but I'm glad that your here
cuz it let's me know that somehow you'd grow
learn to love the broken spirit that I behold
but the past is riddled wit reasons I can give you
but I can't give truth to you, you'll see it grow a little...
once you understand all I had thought n planned
as a young man but couldn't cuz then I couldn't then now I can't
before time takes me I hope I can take you to safety
my shadow shall brace thee as long as you can embrace me

The opening was dope and probably my favorite part although most of the lines in there are quotable. The concept was good and for the most part I felt the emotion behind it.

"but the past is riddled wit reasons I can give you
but I can't give truth to you, you'll see it grow a little..."

^^This was the only bar I had a problem with and it kinda through me off while I was reading it.

But aside from that the whole thing was the shit bro.

pretty solid drop, noticed u used repitition on the word here which explains your comment in my thread lol. nah though, this piece was straight...

"before time takes me I hope I can take you to safety
my shadow shall brace thee as long as you can embrace me"

^solid closer...

Nice drop, keep doing ya thing playa. 1