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Before Every Fight i Make Sure i Say A Prayer
Swing A Sword Viciously i'll Even Slay Tha Air

Double meaning, like the opening

After i Pick Up My Helmet i Slide My Armor On
i'll Slaughter Everything in Site Even 'Til Tha Farms Are Gone
i'll Pull A Bow An Fire Arrows Leavin More Wounds Than Bullet Holes
When it Comes To Feed My Word'll Go Further Than Tha Mullet Goes

Flow Stitched Tight, Feeling The Mullet Goes LOL.


i Could Charm A Snake 'Til Tha Alarms Awake
Tha People That'll Be Quick To Defeat You in Feudal Ways
i'm Stuck in Tha Feudal Days Where A Hangin is A Show Not A Tragedy
Leave Lyricists Over Thrown My Kingdom Will Never Grow Mad At Me

Thys Shit came Out Crisp Feeling the Flow ..


i Know They're Lyin But i'll Let 'Em Tell Me More
i'll Make Sure They Feel A Wrath They've Never Felt Before
it Could Be Black Magic Tha Way My Word Turns Tha Pages
i'll Never Settle For Less i'll Get Tha Power i've Yearned For Ages


Weak Closer On Ur Part, But multis was cool.


Anyways i Liked How This Verse Was Nitted Together, Multis Tight.. Hand Some Jump Out Lines. Written Pretty Well

keep Dropping

Nice twist to the opener...
Loved this line "i'll Slaughter Everything in Site Even 'Til Tha Farms Are Gone"
Like the way you stayed on the Fuedal point. Nice word play throughout TOYH.

You don't drop a lot, but when you do it's worth the read.

Pros:
opener (those first two lines were dope)
multis
stayed on topic consistently all the way through

the only real weakness i saw from this was the closer, I felt like you could have come harder to end it but the rest of it was good.

Forced is a word that is thrown around a lot. It simply means, not natural.

I'm really surprised that you're still promoting this piece. I thought it was decent at best.

I don't quite know where you were going with the metaphor. Not trying to trash you, I just didn't find that much time was put into this.

Liked this line though..

"i'll Pull A Bow An Fire Arrows Leavin More Wounds Than Bullet Holes"