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I am new to this text stuff, but i wrote this and just wanted to see if people could see what i was writing about...

Its a mistle that is locked down it seeks and destroys
all that is happiness laughter and all that is joy
It will block out the sun and it will fill you with darkness
Hardly give you room to breath yeah it is just heartless
It will sit there and watch while you strive to survive
You are ready to give up but it keeps you alive
To just sit there and question then into deep dark depression
You will fade into the mist then you'll have the impression
That your not worth the breath for some1 to call out your name
Your not worth the time of day or a reason to stay
Then the cycle of thought they just grow into fear
Then you think it would be better if you just disappeared
It wont need a second time it will kill you the first
Its the number one curse that the devel put on this earth
There is no point to fight it it just has all the control
Dont stand against man this would be impossible

Riddle me this.....riddle me that
whose afraid of the big black bat?



I thought this was cool, then again to riddle
is to NOT put it out there so evidently
although it was dope it wasn't a real riddle
.......in my mind

either way dope structure for a first time texter
some nice lines in there aswell
nothin' to make your eyes pop out...but I don't think that's what you was goin' for
this was on point tho'....just needed more...visuals to bring it to life!

keep writing tho'!