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$.@MB!T!0N.$ wrote:

Who Spits With No Meaning Riddle Me That?
Ego'd Out Cop Get Hit With a Victory Slap, Wheres ya Victory At?
Bring My History Back .. Your History .. Brat..

[Brat is awkward to throw in there, other then that nice]

Steve Biko Face What i'm Headed For Is Peace
Metiphoric Beast, U'll Blow After Life Yeah Medics For it Least

[Nope, bad wording]

I'm With it Moore Like It's All Conspired you Should All Retire
Have ya Coff Drop to Hell We call it Halls of Fire .. Mauling Tires

[The wordplay with the cough drop line was exception, but the mauling tires at the end wasn't necessary again. That is like a run on sentence without purpose]

Willing To Even Move, this Ain't Even Dude,
Like John Doe ain't recognized By Mom Yo ..

[No]

A Season Cruise is Shipping Spice Ta Me ..
Boston Tea Party The bitch n i can Give Life Ta Sea ..

[No]

They say ya punchlines ain't Direct enough
Mix Personals with Complexity n they don't Get the Stuff

[Nice]

I'm Stranded But they Ain't Hearing Me Def As Fuck ..
If it Ain't a Run Down .. i'm Up Loading Mics ..
When They Stuck H Ta the A Z-Share Like The Uploading Site

[Trying to fit too much into one bar]

Living The Family Life, Mobbing On M-Cs Like The Family Type
I'ma Uprising The Anti Christ, Had To Bann Me Twice ..
Napoleon To Hitler I've Painted pictures Slowly in The Scriptures
Another Rapper Shot.. Keep Thinking U Holy In The Twister ..
Ya Spin is a Joke, I Get To The Point If i have to Swim In a Boat
Cannibal Tendencies Handle My Enemies

[That rhyme is sick]

No Deception Their Reflection Hits Candles & Hennessey
Exotic Jab's Grazes What X Topics Grab'd,
So a Star Is Far From what The Next Rocket Stabs

[A rocket doesn't stabm as you say in the next bar.]

Or Should I Say Flamed? How Could I Stay Chained
No Hanging Medallion just Banging With Stallions
Smooth Moves On Every Rocky Surface,Though Nervous
I Don't shoot ideals i reach um This is Wit No Cocky Purpose
Trench-coat Trench home, Dense Smoke like i went Chrome
Tense Votes, Tense Bones, Friends Choke At The Vent Stone
Atheist Or Believer, Passive Or Aggressive,
Take This In The Freezer,Cold Cus Everything i'm Asking is Neglected

A few quotable lines that really stood out then some filler.

why thank you my Kind sir.


One thing .. Going like line , line , line , line
n it makes the Flow sound sick .. So i'm not Sure How my "run ons" Are a flaw. lol Not fighting it just Curious. Let me know

I didn't mean that you have run ons all the time.

The mauling tires part doesn't fit in the actual bar, and it could go without it. That is all I am saying, it doesn't further the line at all.