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How can I elevate my text if my mind doesn't work?
How can I be the best without lines for a verse?
How can I claim to be blessed if my rhyming is cursed?
Every time I'm distressed it's like my writing gets worse.
On my grind, put in work to prove my skills' indisputable
Resigned to be first, tailor-made, but still I'm unsuitable
The lions that lurk crave to slay my will to be musical
I'm primed to burst, a slave to display these views I hold
Truth be told, I'm in a mental frozen paralysis
Lost my muse in the cold; now I'm envokin analysis
Reviewin my old writtens, finding that all that I've spit
its flawed, faulty and sick so I'm thinkin of callin it quits
I use to scrawl with wit now I'm declining falling in pits
the words I've searched for are perched behind this wall of bricks
No verbs for scripts, my thoughts can't be expressed
I've reached my limit and now I've exhausted my text.

JJunior77 wrote:How can I elevate my text if my mind doesn't work?
How can I be the best without lines for a verse?
How can I claim to be blessed if my rhyming is cursed?
Every time I'm distressed it's like my writing gets worse.
On my grind, put in work to prove my skills' indisputable
Resigned to be first, tailor-made, but still I'm unsuitable
The lions that lurk crave to slay my will to be musical
I'm primed to burst, a slave to display these views I hold
Truth be told, I'm in a mental frozen paralysis
Lost my muse in the cold; now I'm envokin analysis
Reviewin my old writtens, finding that all that I've spit
its flawed, faulty and sick so I'm thinkin of callin it quits
I use to scrawl with wit now I'm declining falling in pits
the words I've searched for are perched behind this wall of bricks
No verbs for scripts, my thoughts can't be expressed
I've reached my limit and now I've exhausted my text.

I thought the first two bars were exceptional and not forced ideas at all.

Really though this whole piece stayed on a solid concept and I had no problem with any of it.

This was nice, I see your still elevating your skills
very dope tho, nice imagery and the vocab is up there
keep writing my dude!