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I apologize for the verse that was "The Battle's Never Over".

I'm more advanced than the weapons used in foreign lands/
textcee that vicariously lives through a mic like Jordan fans/
Suicidal genius, these types of prose inspired Jesus/
mega maniacal pieces, blow a hole through your entire thesis/
no control, subzero temperatures, a hero to my mentors/
the serious flow is all I have to show to my lyrical contenders/
words can't describe the emperor, rhymes are a mind adventure/
scribes identity the lines from the sky that divide the center/
push aside the vibe inside of the room when I decide to enter/
I have more pryde than the wisest member of a tribe in Kenya/
quick to maneuver through the lanes, I could sit in a cruiser/
I'd rather see the view from a plane, taking a trip to bermuda/
but sick of computers, drinking from a fifth, I'm a liquor abuser/
that always stays on the side of factz like mickey's producers/
commit like a buddah - scripts writ like I was a man of the future/
only way I see-an-n to my career, is if I replace Anderson Cooper/

Psalms 21:10:/
got the game in palm/
until the 2010 ends/
shedding the weak/
saving the strong/
until the day that I'm gone/

The words that I'm spitting are clicking with zipping verbal precision/
breaking through commercial restriction is my personal mission/
the gain is worth the affliction, disagree with a verse that is written/
you'll get a-xes through your face like a security system/
I'd be perfectly smitten to address all MC's it would be a great honor/
they'll see their face-in the times like the Christmas Day bomber/
you don't have to wait longer, I think you suck, I'm a hate monger/
we'll see Pryde vanish like Karl Rove embarrassed by his gay father/
I'm a great scholar of writtens, more than that I'm a man of ego/
I don't lay down for politics, at the same time, I don't stand for people/
these incredible hands are lethal, and all my future plans are evil/
we don't have to go into the distant-pass, we'll throw back, Dan Marino/
the warriors clash, I'm cutting down trees on my victorious path/
its like recording a track with a sample, I'm importing to rap/
more than just that, MC's can't believe where I'm metaphorically at/
cuz even the way they bite into oreo snack is choreographed/

Psalms 21:10:/
got the game in palm/
until the 2010 ends/
shedding the weak/
saving the strong/
until the day that I'm gone/

I've got a childish innocence, I promise my style is gimmickless/
Maybe it was wild coincidence, when we reconciled our differences/
I filed a whole new pile of incidents like violent immigrants/
so many rivals, and written bits, I was liable to flip with scripts/
another nice written was enemite, knew that I was smart and strong/
well that's partly wrong, I wasn't muslim, but I martyred-dom/
never made a party song, still had the skill but my heart was gone/
this march was long, now I'm back to finish what I started on/
I created this mess, took a break because I fucking hated to text/
placing my bets, that I'm still embraced as the gravest of threats/
one of my greatest regrets, is the days when I was blazing the vets/
I didn't save my flow in a tub, so today I could just bathe in success/
hate on complex, I didn't invent rapping, and I'm not taking the credit/
writing maybe fetish, but its not how I flow, its the way that i edit/
the game is pathetic, while I'm a lexus, because I ride with the turns/
as far as my drive is concerned, the masters are coming, tiger returns/

Not quite sure why this got slept on. Nice solid multies. Simple in it's on way yet enough metaphores to keep you on your toes. "the gain is worth the affliction, disagree with a verse that is written/
you'll get a-xes through your face like a security system/" - didn't know you had punches in you like that Plex.

I think the hook could've been thought out a little more, not that it needed to be as diverse as the verses but could've shed a little more meaning in it.

"I created this mess, took a break because I fucking hated to text/
placing my bets, that I'm still embraced as the gravest of threats/
one of my greatest regrets, is the days when I was blazing the vets/
I didn't save my flow in a tub, so today I could just bathe in success/" -- i was diggin this.. straight from the heart.

When you break it down like that, it surely doesn't feel as good as I thought it was originally!

lol..

I apologize for the verse that was "The Battle's Never Over".

I'm more advanced than the weapons used in foreign lands/
textcee that vicariously lives through a mic like Jordan fans/

"this was nice... i liked the reference

Suicidal genius, these types of prose inspired Jesus/
mega maniacal pieces, blow a hole through your entire thesis/

only thing wrong here is how u would blow a hole into the thesis. other than that it was nice

no control, subzero temperatures, a hero to my mentors/
the serious flow is all I have to show to my lyrical contenders/

this could of been re-worked to be ill

words can't describe the emperor, rhymes are a mind adventure/
scribes identity the lines from the sky that divide the center/
push aside the vibe inside of the room when I decide to enter/
I have more pryde than the wisest member of a tribe in Kenya/

this shit was sick
quick to maneuver through the lanes, I could sit in a cruiser/
I'd rather see the view from a plane, taking a trip to bermuda/
but sick of computers, drinking from a fifth, I'm a liquor abuser/
that always stays on the side of factz like mickey's producers/
commit like a buddah - scripts writ like I was a man of the future/
only way I see-an-n to my career, is if I replace Anderson Cooper/

wow... u went off here... great ending

Psalms 21:10:/
got the game in palm/
until the 2010 ends/
shedding the weak/
saving the strong/
until the day that I'm gone/

The words that I'm spitting are clicking with zipping verbal precision/
breaking through commercial restriction is my personal mission/
the gain is worth the affliction, disagree with a verse that is written/
you'll get a-xes through your face like a security system/

great multie usage.. all on point here

I'd be perfectly smitten to address all MC's it would be a great honor/
they'll see their face-in the times like the Christmas Day bomber/
you don't have to wait longer, I think you suck, I'm a hate monger/
we'll see Pryde vanish like Karl Rove embarrassed by his gay father/

same here.... all on point

I'm a great scholar of writtens, more than that I'm a man of ego/
I don't lay down for politics, at the same time, I don't stand for people/
these incredible hands are lethal, and all my future plans are evil/
we don't have to go into the distant-pass, we'll throw back, Dan Marino/

all on point here too, im diggin all the references

the warriors clash, I'm cutting down trees on my victorious path/
its like recording a track with a sample, I'm importing to rap/
more than just that, MC's can't believe where I'm metaphorically at/
cuz even the way they bite into oreo snack is choreographed/

again... nice ending to the verse... i liked the metaphorically at line

Psalms 21:10:/
got the game in palm/
until the 2010 ends/
shedding the weak/
saving the strong/
until the day that I'm gone/

I've got a childish innocence, I promise my style is gimmickless/
Maybe it was wild coincidence, when we reconciled our differences/
I filed a whole new pile of incidents like violent immigrants/
so many rivals, and written bits, I was liable to flip with scripts/

this shit is multie multie... hot stuff

another nice written was enemite, knew that I was smart and strong/
well that's partly wrong, I wasn't muslim, but I martyred-dom/
never made a party song, still had the skill but my heart was gone/
this march was long, now I'm back to finish what I started on/

all on point here... not sure why u martyred dom but it was sick

I created this mess, took a break because I fucking hated to text/
placing my bets, that I'm still embraced as the gravest of threats/
one of my greatest regrets, is the days when I was blazing the vets/
I didn't save my flow in a tub, so today I could just bathe in success/

this was hot right here. welll written to a T

hate on complex, I didn't invent rapping, and I'm not taking the credit/
writing maybe fetish, but its not how I flow, its the way that i edit/
the game is pathetic, while I'm a lexus, because I ride with the turns/
as far as my drive is concerned, the masters are coming, tiger returns/

fuckin perfect ending... tiger line had me rollin lol


overall this was solid gold, i like the whole piece, very well written, flow was on point, multie usage was perfect, everything connected the content stayed in tact. this is def a classin in my eyes

Hole in your thesis is an expression.

http://www.google.com/#hl=en&q=%22hole+ ... ecf4f91972

So to say blow a hole into your thesis would be a play on a phrase. I'm positive that this works.

The martyred-dom(ino) is a also an expression to say that I killed him, which is one of the definitions of martyred.

I'm not saying that I'm perfect, I make mistakes all the time writing, but I feel as though I can justify those two bars.

Thanks for the thorough feedback.

i knew the dom thing lol

and ok

^^^^^^^^^^^^^ Its Funny Cuz I'd Seen Your Drop On Another Site Plex, That's How I Came 2 Know Of Illest Lyrics. I Thought That Drop You Left In That Battle Forum Was Pretty Dope.. Much Hasnt Changed Your Still Pretty Dope N Crafty. However One Day I Will Succeed You In Writing Then Ask 4 A Rematch!!

Highlights:
I'd be perfectly smitten to address all MC's it would be a great honor/
they'll see their face-in the times like the Christmas Day bomber/
you don't have to wait longer, I think you suck, I'm a hate monger/
we'll see Pryde vanish like Karl Rove embarrassed by his gay father/

DAYUM WTF?!? Typical Complexity So "Elevated"

This shit was mad ridiculous bro. The whole piece was solid with the multi's, punches, etc. I thought the openers of all three verses were on point and the whole entire second verse, especially the closer was all lyrically astonishing. The chorus I thought could have been better but I think I just need to hear it to music to determine a better opinion about that part. Thanks for the feed on my piece also, by the way.

Creative, what was the site?

And thanks for all the feedback.

holy fuck yo.
jaw droppin at times man.
A scripture in its rawest form.
very slick bro.