Wordplay Keystyle

[NoVeL]

Different Kinds, Simple Minds Imprisoned Life Decision Wise

Watch The Time, Commerce Listens, Semi Rhymes, Align Divisions

Chi Bull, Vibe is Pippen

Heart Disfigured, Lungs Smitten, Oddest Visions

A Hero Climbing Trees Savin' Kittens Is An Honest Living

Fact Or Fiction? 2 Modest & Not Descriptive, Obnoxious Gibber

No -ish But I Didn't Have A Pot 2 Piss In

[complexity]

Different Kinds Imprisoned By Life N Conscience Decisions, Watch The Time Is Ticking You Might Consider Ya Minds Condition, As The Commerce Listens Check The Division No Chicago Bull Though These Shots R Aligned From Pippen, Would Leave Ya Heart Disfigured N Ya Lungs Smitten In The Oddest Vision, Still A Hero Climbing Trees 2 Save Harmless Kittens Is An Honest Living.. If I Posed This Scenario 2 You Would You Honor It Fact Or Fiction? Fuck It Im 2 Modest Usually Im Not So Descriptive In My Obnoxious Gibber, No -ish Cuz I Grew Up Without A Pot 2 Piss In..

A) Leave feedback on other peoples pieces.

B) The metaphors definitely did their job, because it surely would take a few readings of this to even grasp what you were trying to say. I don't know if that is a good thing or not. The only thing that I really made out of it, so far, is that firefighters are good people.

[QwarterZ]

This was cool to a certain degree
I dug the vibe, but the structure kinda f'd me up
then again I'm diggin' the multi's
they bring out the true expression in this
keep writing!

[FlipSide]

or not even that...they just save kittens lol... but other than that the wordplay was ok..just dont know how it would go in a group of dudes with flow...

[Riggz]

Wordplay without direction can leave spectators baffled.. which is about what you've done here. Clean it up, to make sense... and I think you'll have a nice piece here.