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I'm dat nigga dissecting foes with infectious flows
my imagery is sick, need a clinic to address my prose
diagnose my notes, maybe just inject a dose
a corrective antidote, known to make impressive quotes

Solid.


collect what i wrote, no it wasn't written by ghosts
its a product of my thoughts I got from sittin at shows
observing the pro's, taking notes, every minute i grow

Liked This ..


on the road to the gold, with world-record olympic flows
if you didn't know, understand this game's simple
I'll spit fire that'll weld sand into a stain-glass window

Cool..


you couldn't make the bland grand with my brain as a rental
I'm the individual with a plan to stamp my name in your temples

average bar for one of your drops.


excreting lyrical chemicals that just bled from my mental
I wrote the manual, stencil, all with lead from my pencil
I'm blessed to resemble, what you'd expect of a miracle
The best, at my minimal, I'll leave the rest disassembled

Nice way 2 End it .. I'm feeling this homie

Stay up N Keep dropping

ambition pretty much summed it up perfectly

n i dont know what rugged hero is talkin about but u had multies thru out this piece, some were off some syllabols tho...

this shit was aight content, flow, n scheme wise... nothin off the charts but still dope.

i liked it man

big ups kid

JJunior77 wrote:I'm dat nigga dissecting foes with infectious flows
my imagery is sick, need a clinic to address my prose
diagnose my notes, maybe just inject a dose
a corrective antidote, known to make impressive quotes
collect what i wrote, no it wasn't written by ghosts

[Just one syllable was off]

its a product of my thoughts I got from sittin at shows
observing the pro's, taking notes, every minute i grow
on the road to the gold, with world-record olympic flows
if you didn't know, understand this game's simple

[pretty nice, flow wise]

I'll spit fire that'll weld sand into a stain-glass window
you couldn't make the bland grand with my brain as a rental
I'm the individual with a plan to stamp my name in your temples
excreting lyrical chemicals that just bled from my mental
I wrote the manual, stencil, all with lead from my pencil
I'm blessed to resemble, what you'd expect of a miracle
The best, at my minimal, I'll leave the rest disassembled

Honestly. I feel bad for saying that this was a bit below average, after your incredibly generous feedback on my piece, but that's where I'm at with it. Just didn't feel natural a lot of the times, keep dropping though.

I was feeling the beginning you still shining I see
really nice flow at points then sometimes you'll lose it
I'd like to see this revised and made longer
it seems like it's written for a track...very nice tho'