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Found this in the vault... thought I'd share even though it was written in 2005.


Searching for completion in a shattered mirror/
Grasp my fears, wring my soul of these scattered tears/
I act sincere, brain comprised of backwards gears/
Sunshine is just an illusion in this atmosphere/
Cracks appear inside of a ceramic heart/
I can't discard these love crimes that leave my canvas scarred/
Life's damaged art, her lips take the place of a brush/
Betrayel is the pallet, the paint erases the trust/
A blade invades my back and remains til it rusts/
I don't deserve this, I've never had the greatest of luck/
The pain just erupts, I can feel the chambers rupture/
Such a disturbing image, I wonder if she'll paint another/
Wish I could make her suffer, but my compassion rules it out/
The lack of trust has me swimming laps in a pool of doubt/
Tears in huge amounts fall by the fluid ounce/
It's cruel, but is it enough to make this fool renounce?/
I'm indecisive, but as far as love is concerned/
Trust and forgiveness are the toughest to earn/
I'm sick of hurting, its causing my stomach to churn/
So cold, these ripped pictures will give me something to burn/
Like I wasn't concerned, she says I have a lack of emotion/
I'm a sailboat on a calm day, trapped in the ocean/
Hope is all I've got but it comes in short supply/
Bored with lies, feel like I'm being tortured til I'm forced to die/
Horrified to lose her but I'm afraid to stay/
Fearing it'll happen again or the stains won't fade away/
I think it's safe to say this catch-22 is killer/
Hearing two stories, but I'm not sure who's to filter/
Too bewildered, these days I don't know who to trust/
Two hearts at stake, my fate depends on who I choose to crush/

The pain just erupts, I can feel the chambers rupture/
Such a disturbing image, I wonder if she'll paint another/
Wish I could make her suffer, but my compassion rules it out/
The lack of trust has me swimming laps in a pool of doubt/
Tears in huge amounts fall by the fluid ounce/
It's cruel, but is it enough to make this fool renounce?/
That was just hot....

Tears in huge amounts fall by the fluid ounce/
It's cruel, but is it enough to make this fool renounce?/
I'm indecisive, but as far as love is concerned/
Trust and forgiveness are the toughest to earn/
^^^^^^^^^that was dope

I really like this piece gots a dope realness to it
very smooth vibe aswell
came across reeeeal deep! i'm digging it my dude
keep writing!

Hope is all I've got but it comes in short supply/
Bored with lies, feel like I'm being tortured til I'm forced to die
^^^^^^^^^realest piece and flowed nicely!

I was gonna stop reading after it started on the emo tip,
I aint gonna front, lol but it actually kept my interest
All the way through and made me want to keep reading,
Each line stayed on point in terms of relativity as well
As a seamless transition into each other, multies was
dope of course, although the general topic isn't much my
style, I can't hate on the fundamentals, everything was on point.

this kept a good flow and dope metaphors here and there like TOYH said some good imagery which was nice but still with all that i couldnt bring my self to like this piece i mean it had all these dope things but i just couldnt like the piece as a whole but still for an old piece this was still pretty nice