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Just a 16 for an upcoming collabo,
Feed is appreciated & returned...

[Phasewon]
You don't wanna battle, you wanna chitter chatter, 'cause the minute after
I scribble scrabble some chicken scratch your shit'll splatter
I don't jibber jabber with some bitter rapper, tryin' to get to my level,
I'll tilt your ladder, serve your style on a silver platter
Your wig'll shatter, now I'll let you deal with that
If I aint spillin' raps, I'm chillin' with some villains who be pealin' caps
How real is that? When I'm causing catastrophes
With assault and battery, baffling rappers that battle me
Insanity's spillin' when I'm savagely killin'
And rapidly drillin' your wisdom like a cavity fillin'
Amityvillin', I'm a Supervillain who's used to killin'
Pregnant ladies and deadin' babies, tryin' to get rid of the future children
Killin' for fun, just for the thrill of the hunt
I'm like the illegitimate son of Attila the Hun
Spillin' your blood, when I stab your bladder with a jagged dagger
Then I'm turnin' battle rappers into sacrificial cattle after

Holy shit i almost missed this , Was buried in other scripts lol

The flow was PERFECTION.
But i feel as if you couldve done better.
The punches just dont have anything special about them

Overall id give this drop from YOU a 7/10

if someone else had wrote this id probably give them a 8-9




Its still amazing though.
KEEP EM COMMIN

That was absolutely sick.

How real is that? When I'm causing catastrophes
With assault and battery, baffling rappers that battle me
Insanity's spillin' when I'm savagely killin'
And rapidly drillin' your wisdom like a cavity fillin'
Amityvillin', I'm a Supervillain who's used to killin'
Pregnant ladies and deadin' babies, tryin' to get rid of the future children
Killin' for fun, just for the thrill of the hunt
I'm like the illegitimate son of Attila the Hun

'nuff said. Keep doin your thing bro.

LoL @ Rainman's reply


either way I thought this was purdy dope
came across smoothly with that beat
got a dope ass flow to it
some of the punches were hit n miss
but good nonetheless

Insanity's spillin' when I'm savagely killin'
And rapidly drillin' your wisdom like a cavity fillin'
Amityvillin', I'm a Supervillain who's used to killin'
^^^^^^^^^^^even tho' you used killin' twice I still thought it was dope! keep writing!

I liked the flow a lot. You had some mediocre punchlines, but they worked well with the syllables you used. Looks like you were writing over a beat you were listening too or humming.

'Preciate the feed, yall. Leave a link up to your joint
If you currently have a piece up and I'll RTF asap.

7/10 would ranked it higher if u threw a haymaker in the mix but its still pretty dope with the focus on depicting gore